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Sonnet IV – Succulent Lips
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Sonnet IV – Succulent Lips |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
‘Sonnet IV – Succulent Lips’ To place parted lips upon your soft skin Is to dream a vision sweeter than life Questioning in my mind, where have you been Through loves lost and the agony in strife A sweeping angel with shiny pale eyes The color blue sustains amongst your face A chiseled body made to be my prize Wearing silky cloth of heavenly lace Take me now, swiftly glide through all the sea Swim with tropical fish to be with yours Close your eyes, seeing not all but of me Take my hand, left stranded upon the shores Walk this beach of crying colors so bright ‘Till the sun dims down low upon this night Jeremy D. Raulinaitis "The *bump for jeremydraul's work, hahaha!!" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Well done, Mr. Knightfellow! I loved the sonnet! These always turn out very nicely, don't they? I'll give one a shot sometime. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
I also love sonnets, although doing anything that standardized is against my beliefs. doesn't meet I don't enjoy reading a fantastic work that's going in my library though! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
allan: thanks bro. theyre really not that hard at all, just need to follow format and they end up sounding great! good luck... elvenblood: hehe, the best writer of all time wrote in sonnet form quite frequently! thanks for your reply JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
The whole alter ego thing.......very intersting Jeremy. I liked the sonnet beaucoup. REgina |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here jer...........written very well. I couldn't write a sonnet like that.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Quite delighted at the replies, thanks JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey it's great..there's no thing new to say. Keep em coming...  Bel |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Oke stop making the people who can't write sonnets feel bad, which isn't me.  I'm kidding, you better keep writing this good. Or not...but please?  Very beautiful... and in the end we still pretend the time we spend not knowing when we're finally free and you could be -NIN "The Wretched" Angel of Darkness |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
W.S. will be really proud of you "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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