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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
tommorrow is more than a day tommorrow is the enevitable future that will never come tommorrow is for the optimist tommorrow is for the procrastinator it just might get done tommorrow is never definate tommorrow is never here always just out of reach tommorrow is just another night tommorrow is just another day just another time to lay on the beach tommorrow is another day to die tommorrow is another day to fear will i do everything right tommorrow is another day to plan tommorrow is another day to work i just have so much to get done tommorrow is another day to live tommorrow is another day to love to make the best of your life tommorrow is another day to cherish tommorrow there might be another chance to show how much i love you just kinda a flow of thoughts, nothin special CLB let the fighting words lie let the candle light die let the sun come up let the same imply ~EvE 6 |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
the word "Tommorrow" looks cool if you see it too many times.  It's going to be burned into my vision for awhile. The poem was great, I thought. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
I don't know what to say!  You realize you're spoiling me?  Thank you so much, it means soo much. You are so sweet! I love you Bel |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Jobeth says: "That was a very good poem. I liked it. That was so sweet. Awww!  " Bel |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
wow, that was really clever. What a great topic and tone in this writing. I loved this part: "tommorrow is for the optimist tommorrow is for the procrastinator it just might get done" JR "The *bump for jeremydraul's work, hahaha!!" |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
that last reply was from me  JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Jer........are you crazy? Yer not dreadedliver.......don't believe him! It's a trick!!! Anyway....nicely done.......i sang it and played it to guitar......i liked how it sounded. Haha...ok great one here  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
the way you've been writing tomorrow is another day you'll feel her love "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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FallNTears Junior Member
since 2001-03-05
Posts 20 |
That is really good. Tomorrow is more than the day that will be there when you wake up. Your poem really made me think *Me* *Having a nightmare is nothing compared to living one.* |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Wonderful thoughts here. I like the verse DreadedLiver pointed out the best. Tomorrow is holds so many possibilities but never take it for granted... Thanks for the great read Jason |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Nice poem. It is rare to see a poem that repeats as much as this does and is so well written. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
The repitition really helps this poem! That's not common.. bvut very well done with this poem. Beautifully written. *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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