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Vitriolic poetry no more.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
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0 posted 2001-03-05 04:53 PM

Umm.

Vitriolic poetry but I'm just misunderstood,
Everything I wish was, If I ever could,
Harmonising life with my natural rhyme,
Running from death and wasting all my time,
Contemplating life and not seeing any point,
Looking at those losers starved of a joint,
Knowing I am above it, knowing that I have a use,
Just got to keep on going and take all this abuse,
Empathise with me and I'll sympathise with you,
Just keep your head down, get on with life theres nothing you cant do,
Don't you doubt tommorow for it's always just next door,
Keep on living wisely , keep on wanting more,
Sacrifice your bitterness in hope for inspiration,
Just wait in line for you divine designation.

Can't see what i'm trying to say here...
Marshal Zu.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-03-05 05:11 PM

Seems like an amalgamation of some good advice.
Organized well... but perplexing.
I enjoyed it for these reasons.

~Allan

Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-03-05 05:36 PM

Nicely done here. I simply loved the message!
Dopey Dope says NO to dope!!!
Straightegde all the way baby!

nicely done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-03-06 01:24 PM

you did good marshalzu
a topic well deserved to write about

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

4 posted 2001-03-06 03:07 PM

Its really good. Im gonna put it in my libary.hope to lots and lots more.
Regina

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