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Dreams and Reality |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA 
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I really had this dream a few days ago, and wrote this that morning. Days before this, I met probably the most perfect person I've ever met! enjoy! In my dream last night I was in a different land A land of sword and magic Guided by the hand We fought many battles We somehow always won Despite the organized armies To our farmer’s sons We did not have magic And lived with stolen supplies And our mage couldn’t even Conjure up dragonflies We had sensibility And never missed: Once took a mans lips With a whip, as he kissed We were harsh even cruel But we fought for a better life So to make it easier for us to win later The survivors took our strife I was not the leader But I killed many men So the first chance they got The Empire let me into their den It was a messenger mission But the King’s son had plans I knew it, so I killed him anyway Knowing I’d never again see the clans I was captured as I left And put in a cell for the night I couldn’t try to escape I couldn’t win this fight I was brought out at noon And put in shackles There was a parade for me With no bitter cackles I was a hero to them all But I don’t know how I asked for a bolder walk And they did, on the now We walked with everyone seeing Though I don’t know why Then it hit me And I started to cry I had spent my life worrying Always future within view Now I was being put to death Nothing to look forward to Nothing to worry about That is happiness true Now that I know who you are I’ve found that happiness in you "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow I thought that this was great. The little story was great! It drew me in and kept me interested throughout the whole poem. Great job!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is great, as dopey says it really draws you in, and I didn't realise how long it was until I actually read it again... great work Marshal Zu. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey, this is great! I'm quite impressed, good job  Bel "And you're my obsession I love you to the bones And Ana wrecks your life Like an anorexia life" - "Ana's Song", Silverchair |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Wow... awesome post! A little story-telling going on here. Very nice! *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yeah, storytelling format rules!  You did an excellent job here. Dreams are fun to communicate, but we often feel like we are stealing the idea, even though it came from our own brain. Excellent work, Bryan. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
im applauding you right now beautiful narration you deserve all the positive reponses beautiful "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Wow, what a beautiful message. Although a few lines didnt really rhyme well together... but there was such imagery and deepness, I loved it a lot!!! Library bound! JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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