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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
-=untitled moment=- if you should one day for some reason look back what moment will you search? what image will you freeze? if you could one day for some reason go back what instant will you relive? what frame will you re work? what if i told you that this would be it? this is my moment the one id relive what if i told you what this would be really it? that it is perfect and i would change nothing. -San ------------- note: crap i know. dont say its not my best cause i know that... San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Who cares if its your best? I really liked it. Nothing that's created from your mind is crap. So there! Hah!  ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Pretty good. And you told me not to say it.  ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey, pretty good..I like the concept.  Bel |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here!! I thought the idea was great!! Was this one that you wrote in history along with your Coma white rip off's? haha.... Still gotta tell you "the unknown thing", but later.... Dude, I thought this rocked. I liked the whole thing.....maybe a bit of work to revise it, but for the most part.....YEA!!!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
that was a pleasant read. It truely captivated your romanticism?? I think.... well nice one! JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You too are a Mr. Valentino i see  you did good San..did kinda taper down in the end, but the idea is really good thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
I thought it was quiet good. not your best. but still good work. REgina |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
NOT YOUR BEST!! tehee, sorry I HAD TO!  anyways, what are you talking about?!?! I loved it by the way and you know what...nothing generated by the human mind is less than significant. yum yum keep 'em up. ~*~Jesilyn~*~"Tell me why you cry" |
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