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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
"Break Up" Wishing you were dead Keeping the pain fed As your heart began to tear Dead? You feel like your already there An unbearable feeling You find yourself kneeling From this pain your too weak to stand You wish you could die and fade into the land A pain starts in your stomach and works it's way out Even though you want to, you're too weak to shout A word repeats in your head, "Why?" You want to say all that time was wasted And that true love was never really tasted But you still love her even though she brought this pain You now know you probably are insane You're too weak to stand and dig your own grave So you lay motionless asking what was the point in the love you gave It's over now only one thing left to do "Goodbye Megan…I'll miss you" < >¶Øʆ< |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This one was nice. Very simple scheme, and a good last line. A pretty good job.  Nice to see you posting again, POA. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
THis is like EXACTLY how I feel right now, but the "her"s and "shes"s and "Megan" should be replaced with "him" and "his" and "Justin" Thanks for the read  Now I know I'm not the only one www.angelfire.com/wv2/poetrycorneri dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Is it me or does this seem REALLY sad and morbid? It could be me in one of my little bouts, but I'm thinking ery strong emotion. I don't know, my two cents I guess, hurts from here though... "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
it's only you evenblood.....hehe ok no.....it's quite sad. I liked it though!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Oh...well, I'm sorry you're going through this. But I'm going to give you a girl's pov...maybe one who's broken a heart before. We don't usually mean to do it. Our emotions are conflicted, or are friends and families influence us, or we didn't know what we were getting into, and now that we need to be free, we don't know how to do it the right way. I'm not apologizing for your girl, I just know what it's like to hurt someone unintentionally, and not realize the effect till it's too late. jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
no elvenblood it's not just you. I believe if you ask anyone that knows me and/or my writing it is all dark and sad and morbid. COOL HUH?! anyways thanks everyone for the input. Means alot to me right now. >¶Øʆ< |
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orange()alligator Junior Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 21 |
tony i liked the poem...i'm really sorry about u and megan :-( hope ur okay..come online n message me!!!! ur friend -bergundy- |
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