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Isabel Galaxia
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0 posted 03-04-2001 08:47 PM       View Profile for Isabel Galaxia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Isabel Galaxia

Okay this sucks horribly, just think of the "Ana's Song(Open Fire)" by Silverchair if you can...

Is this an obsession
Is everyone just making it bigger
Can you see my bones
Can you see through me

I don't know why but I need it
You don't understand
Can't you see
Can't you see what I see in my head

Is this my obsession
They're making it bigger
Can't you see my bones
Can't you see the bones

I don't know why but I need this
You can't understand
You don't see
You don't see the fat I see

Why is it an obsession
I need it now
Just get off my back
Just leave me alone

-Okay now, I wrote this while talking to a guy(who wasn't really talking back), listening to Silverchair, and attempting to correctly use Henna(if there's anyone who can do that can you give me a hint here?). This is much "inspired" by "Ana's Song" it has no rhyme or anything, please just try to read between the lines. Thanks so much...
Bel


"And you're my obsession
I love you to the bones
And Ana wrecks your life
Like an anorexia life"
- "Ana's Song", Silverchair
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1 posted 03-04-2001 09:14 PM       View Profile for DancinQueen   Email DancinQueen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DancinQueen

hey i havent seen you around here in awhile. i always like to think the best poems are the ones that come out of nowhere and/or inspired by odd things you just happen to be doing all at once. but neways im rambling great poem..i liked it

*dq


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2 posted 03-04-2001 09:27 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

I don't know much about Silverchair... but this poem was alright.
Pretty good job.
Wish I could be more helpful.
~Allan

Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan

Isabel Galaxia
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3 posted 03-04-2001 09:41 PM       View Profile for Isabel Galaxia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabel Galaxia

Thanks very much for replying!!
DQ- Yeah, I should really be around here more often, thanks
Allan- Thanks much. As for Silverchair, they're an Australian group with a few albums out.. The song, "Ana's Song" is about one of the members' anorexia.
And well....how that applies to my life...I was hoping I wouldn't have to say. Any of you that know me, or anything I've written before...maybe you'll get this...
Thanks SO much!!
Bel
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4 posted 03-04-2001 10:01 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Well from the not so subtle hints that you've given us, I think it might be safe to say that you are suffering from......anorexia? If you are then I suggest you seek some aid or help from a friend or a professional.
Nice poem.

About Silverchair......they rock!!
First album released when the lead singer was 15 (frogstomp)in 1995.....the lead singer has the anorexia.....composed of 3 band members......guitarist/vocalist......bassist and drummer.

after frogstomp there was Neon Ballroom, which is the cd with Ana's song, which by the way Kicks MAJOR butt......then came the album FREAK......freak rocks....if you don't have it....get it.




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
Isabel Galaxia
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5 posted 03-04-2001 10:06 PM       View Profile for Isabel Galaxia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabel Galaxia

Thanks Dopey!! I'm glad I'm not the only one that listens to 'em. Subtle? Am I suffering from anorexia..hm.....well it's not like I've ever been diagnosed. (lol) Come on man you know me better than THAT!! Hey, I'm subtle 5/7 days a week, but not on weekends my friend . lol Thanks again!!
Bel
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6 posted 03-05-2001 08:59 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

I suggest you see a proffesional/doctor. You do might have an eating disorder Isabel. Start now before it's too late

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.
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7 posted 03-06-2001 10:12 AM       View Profile for jeremydraul   Email jeremydraul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jeremydraul

hmm very intriguing...
mind boggling even! nice one!

JR

When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself...
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8 posted 03-06-2001 05:16 PM       View Profile for ethel lahootie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ethel lahootie

hey isabel its jO! wel i just thought id say good poem! i know youre not anorexic (i cant spell) but the poem makes you sound sort of like you are! haha! thats ok thought bc its still a good porm...i like! EAT MORE! have fun! ~ethel~
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9 posted 03-06-2001 09:06 PM       View Profile for Isabel Galaxia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabel Galaxia

Acire- *sigh*....I dunno what to tell you muchacho...
Jeremy- Thank you much
Ethel- So I see you've joined....thanks Jo ur too funny...
Thanks so much for replying!!

Bel
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10 posted 03-07-2001 09:35 AM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

just showing some concern Isabel
muchacho? i like that

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.
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Wow... this one hit home. I almost cried reading this one. I hope you're not struggling with this. But if you EVER need to talk to someone, trust me, I would love to chat. Wonderful poem...

*Jennifer

"My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see."
Isabel Galaxia
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12 posted 03-07-2001 09:55 PM       View Profile for Isabel Galaxia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabel Galaxia

Acire- Yeah, I know
Jennifer- Thank you much, I might have to take you up on that offer.
Thanks again!!!

Bel
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13 posted 03-08-2001 09:44 PM       View Profile for orange()alligator   Email orange()alligator   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for orange()alligator

hey,
i'm listenin to that song now...it's pretty cool. i liked your poem even if it didn't rhyme. if you really do have this disease i hope ya get help.
-bergundy-
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14 posted 03-09-2001 04:59 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Tienes que ir a un professional pa que te ayude. La anorexia no es buena para tu salud, o sea, es una situacion que causa muertes frequentemente, es una enfermedad fisica Y mental. Ponte a pensar un poco sobre esto. Ve a donde un professional en esto, eso es lo mejor que te puedes hacer a ti misma...



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
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15 posted 03-10-2001 01:45 PM       View Profile for Angel in Flight   Email Angel in Flight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel in Flight

Sorry I have not been here in a while.. As for your poem it was heart wrenching, and I agree with Dopey on this situation you are in. We are all here for you if you ever need us, but please for you as well as your family and friends find a doctor and if that is to hard look to a friend, family member, teacher, adult, anyone. I do hope everything works out for the best and you get some help soon if you have not gotten help already. Best of luck with this and I wish the best to come your way.

The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny
Isabel Galaxia
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16 posted 03-11-2001 04:24 PM       View Profile for Isabel Galaxia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabel Galaxia

Burgundy- Yeah, I like the song too, Thanks.
Dopey- Sť. Gracias, pero....
Angel- Thank you much....
Thanks for replying! I wasn't expecting so many!!

Bel
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17 posted 06-07-2001 09:52 AM       View Profile for Heavens Tears   Email Heavens Tears   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Heavens Tears

I have noticed that with many of the poems on this topic, I can usually tell, even if those who have already replied have not.  I think that if you have been there, as I have, you can tell when someone is talking about this subject.  Also, most people who do suffer from this cannot just say "I need help".  My friend once told me, "I cant reach out to someone who wont grab my hand".  This describes this perfectly.  Most anorexics and bulimics do not want help, and like me, are scared of being labeled "weird", or of just wanting attention, both of which I have heard.  Great poem though.  

[This message has been edited by Heavens Tears (edited 06-07-2001).]

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18 posted 06-07-2001 10:05 AM       View Profile for Chel   Email Chel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chel

Hey there,
  This poem made me check myself.  I had to look at myself and make sure it wasnt true.  I love silverchair.  Ana's aong made me realize that i cant take this for granted and that I have to love myself first and if I dont than how can I love someone else.  Keep your head up.

Chel

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"You are special and unique in your own way." "Your FAITH is all you need"

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19 posted 06-07-2001 09:51 PM       View Profile for CLBinLOVE   Email CLBinLOVE   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CLBinLOVE

hey babe, jus surfin the web and ended up here (im in costa Rica on vacation for neone else who wants to know)  nice poem, i think ive read it b4 but since i dont see to have responded as of yet, i thought i might.  anyway nice poem, although the topic is always a little "uncomfortable" for me hehe
i love you baby! and i miss you terribly!

i am blinded by the silence of a breaking heart... i cant see myself

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20 posted 09-08-2001 04:10 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Hey bel,

Another great piece on an ED. Silverchair write some fantastic lyrics and if they inspired you to write this then you're blessed.  

I love this and the style in which you wrote it was fairly unique.
Thanks for sharing.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

 
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