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0 posted 2001-03-04 04:27 PM



At Scout Camp three days later.

I feel dirty, I feel cheap,
Like some hoare that you can't keep,
I know pain and I feel hate,
You don't know what I contemplate
Look at me and see me cry
Don't look away, don't you dare lie,
Destroy my hopes, destroy my dreams
Let me cope, let me scream
Look at me, look at my face,
Don't turn and run coz I won't chase,
Look at me, look in my eyes,
Listen to words in between my sighs,
Talk to me, tell me the truth,
Just your word, I don't need no proof,
I want to know if you love me,
I just want you and me to be.

I. H.A.T.E. R.A.C.H.E.L. P.H.I.L.L.I.P.S

I can't stand you,

Hate flows through me,
Aching heart blue
Tears me free
Everything is fine

Right until I think,
Along the line,
Called the brink,
Hate your name,
Everything I hear,
Love's no game,

Passing cheer,
Hate consuming,
In my life,
Life resuming,
Long live Strife
In my worries,
Passing heart blue,
Silent sorrys,
won't make me love you

I

I think I've lost my appetite,
My appetite for life,
Tonight I don't wan't to fight,
I've put down my fork and knife,
Right now I need to hold you,
Everything gonna be alright,
Deep down I am black and blue,
Because of you tonight,
Everything is nothing,
Cause I'm the only one
All the world is nothing
Understand that I am gone,
Silence will not save you,
Everybody knows,
I am stuck in glue,
My life is sent below,
Destroy me with a joke,
Even laugh at me,
Always trying to poke,
Decisions out of me.
Knowing that you love me,
I might get used to you,
Loving set me free,
Loving made me blue,
Everyday I need more,
Destroying my whole life
Blue heart, I am a bore
You don't need me in your life
You don't need me to love you
Or to hold your hand
Underneath I feel blue
and nothing feels quite grand.

Three poems all expressing my deep hatred of my girlfriend... by the way it was all just a big misunderstanding and she didn't at scout camp and now I am so happy that I just thought that I would share my joy at being so happy but obviously the poems are just well awful...
Marshal Zu.

© Copyright 2001 Andrew Sewell - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-04 04:35 PM


Wow~ powerful powerful emotions. My fav outa the 3 was the first one though. excellent..it flowed so nicely and everything just fit. cant wait to read more

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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2 posted 2001-03-04 04:56 PM


The last poem was huge, and I didn't even notice!
That's the definition of wonderful flow, my friend. The size of each line and the rhyme made this piece absolutely wonderful.

The acrostic was clever.
Well done. And it's good to hear you are happy now.
~Allan

Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan



[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-04-2001).]

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3 posted 2001-03-04 07:27 PM


Wow powerful here.......very powerful.
Especailly the line I hate rachel blala.
Wowow......that was a shocker.
Anyway nicely done here.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-03-04 11:13 PM


a lot of hatred and anger on these poems
hope things get better for you
just tell her how you feel and talk about it

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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