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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Forethought~ This poem does not rhyme, for it is more of a free verse letter to self. It is how I was and still am feeling at this very moment so it has alot of meaning although you most likely wont see it's true colors. Your deceitful tongue lacerated my every move, word, feeling, and being. You scandalous liar and I... stupid enough to fall for you..... How lonely must have you been... to have me love an illusion? And you say that I am “ A daughter of an illusion.”???? Now tell me what is worse being an illusion or loving ,God, who you happen to call one? I, a puzzle unable to be solved?? That , My friend, is the puzzle you made yourself and I am sorry if you can not solve it. You made me apologize and cry for hours because of your misdoing!!!!! How dare you do such a thing to me. To brutally kill my heart and soul. You felt sorry for me???? Well take your sorrow somewhere else we will not have any of your kind within these walls any longer. The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny [This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 03-03-2001).] |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I see all this anger in you that I have not seen before. Whatever it is, hope it gets solved. "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well this was VERY powerful.....I wonder who it's about.....hmmmmmmmmmmmm...... anyway good luck with solving this  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
eh, dont really consider this poetry but it was prominent. JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very powerful piece, Amanda. I'm always the one to point this out, but it would have a nicer ring to it if you were to put a format to it. Maybe take a couple of minutes and try to squeeze it into a scheme? Just a suggestion.  Either way, I guess I should put this in my library, so I never forget it. It's nice to see you venting your emotions so well. I'm glad that you are preserving this forever in poem, personally. I'd talk to you more, but this is a public forum. So I restrict myself to praise on the poem. If you want to talk to me, Amanda, do so personally and privately to me please. I didn't want to have to read all of this in here. I am glad that you still have such a passionate pride. It is one of your stronger qualities. And it compliments your writing well. Best of luck. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hmm i have no comment on this poem except im glad u got your anger out..or some of it ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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