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Tamma
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0 posted 2001-03-01 05:44 PM



I’m just a bottle of emotion
And when my heart’s broken
I can’t help but explode
Into a mess of tears
I’m just a bottle of emotion
Ops, the cork flew off!!
And now everyone knows
That I’m not heartless
And that I do feel pain
And this hurts my heart
I’m just a bottle of emotion
Ops the cork flew off!!
I let them see a part of me
That I don’t like to share
I didn’t want them to see
How much pain I’m really in
I’m just a bottle of emotion
Ops the cork flew off!!
They saw me in pain
And all they did was laugh
Which just made me cry harder
But I had a friend by my side
I’m just a bottle of emotion
Ops the cork flew off!!
I yelled a lil loud
Said some words I didn’t mean
They looked at me funny
And laughed at my tears
I’m just a bottle of emotion
Ops the cork flew off!!
It’s not my fault
I couldn’t hold them back
Don’t look at me like that
I’ll just cry harder
I’m just a bottle of emotion . . .



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jeremydraul
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1 posted 2001-03-01 06:59 PM


very good... loved the repetition of the "oops..." line. That was very creative. My fav. part was:
"I’m just a bottle of emotion
And when my heart’s broken
I can’t help but explode
Into a mess of tears"

Keep smiling


JR

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2 posted 2001-03-02 12:44 PM


Tamma --- smile
and we did know you also have emotions
who said you never did?
hang in there...ok?
be strong
I'll be here if you need someone to talk to

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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3 posted 2001-03-02 05:54 PM


this is wicked wicked good (sorry with the main-ah talk) hehe. i love it! i love the picture you give me of someone crackin open a bottle of champagne... and all the crap coming out. i love it.

~*Valerie*~

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4 posted 2001-03-03 12:44 PM


Aren't we all just bottles of emotions?
Nicely said here.......I like the whole comparison of you and a bottle of emotion. very nicely thought out.



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5 posted 2001-03-03 07:52 PM


Tamma, great piece. Very emotional. I liked it. I will be here if you need someone to talk to. Til then keep up the great work.

Chel


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"Never say 'I Love You' unless you mean it"


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6 posted 2001-03-04 02:44 AM


I thought it was good. The tone was confusing, but I realized later that it was your intent to create such a confusing tone.
The repitition of the line was what made me think this. It sounded kind of sarcastic, a bit playful and almost comical.
But the sorrow behind the rest made it stand out somehow.
I was going to say change this but... on second thought the confusing tone gives the piece an edge.
Great job, Tamma.
~Allan

Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan


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7 posted 2001-03-04 10:03 AM


Tamma, sometimes I feel like that because no one understands how I feel about things. Then they see my pain, I turn around and leave. Just keep smiling Minna

[This message has been edited by Ski*Chick (edited 03-04-2001).]

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8 posted 2001-03-04 01:06 PM


Sowwy it took me a bit to reply. I love this. You know I do. Keep that smilin biz up, and good luck with scopin'...hehe...
~Carly

"The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake."
- Leonardo da Vinci

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9 posted 2001-03-04 04:37 PM


great poem here~ i especially liked the oops the cork flew off part very good..keep it up tamma!

*dq


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10 posted 2001-03-04 07:08 PM


Hey this old friend is back! And heck the poetry will start again for me. But hey Tamma hows it going? Good I hope I love your poem and hope everythign is okay i haven heard from you in a while.

~Love~
Branden

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11 posted 2001-03-05 01:51 PM


library addition...
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