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The Queen and the Launderer (A collaboration w/ Allan)
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The Queen and the Launderer (A collaboration w/ Allan) |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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-=The Queen and the Launderer=- My lovely queen, and lady fair hides behind a goofy smile the locks of gold within her hair compliment her sense of style take the time to read her eyes you may find a dark surprise... Hes a true court jester at heart but don't be fooled by his jokes A child prodigy from the start Good thing he doesn't smoke He tells me he's 26 His way im gonna chuck bricks The evil that dwells in her heart makes mortals cower in fear they scream and they scuttle apart and bellow "queen Kiley is here!" once on the stage, the evil queen preforms for us her dance routine While I preform my devious tasks away in his chamber he sleeps along side his cot lie his masks underneath the pictures of me he keeps awakened by a banging on his door "time to do the laundry of the one you adore.." Was it love or was it fate someday I will be magistrate ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
lay off my sweets "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. [This message has been edited by acire (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
that was neat, i could tell who said what.. awesome job you two. A pleasant read! JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
We ended up breaking all the format rules, and got really messy.  It's mostly inside jokes between me and the evil seductress though.  This one was just for fun. hehehe... and it ~was~ lots of fun. I bow to you, Kiley! And I do your laundry! Thanks for your replies, everyone. ~Allan Welcome to Planet Earth, where the angels tread on the land. ~~Allan, to Amanda. The sunshine hears you not. Speak to the shadows he creates. |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Great use to two differnt points of views. Thought it was one of the very well written collaborations I've read so far. You guys should write more together. "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a fun read ... it's great to see these collaborations! Fine job you two, a wonderful tale!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Great work you two. very kool. Regina |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
sweet |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
G'job peeps!! This was koolio. And Kiley, me likes yer critique message. ~Carly "Nature is not only all that is visible to the eye--it also includes the inner pictures of the soul." ~Edvard Munch |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You two are good, I can only imagine the fun you had writing it Please visit my webpage: http://lakewalker.homestead.com/index.html |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Alan and Kiles --- man, Dopey didn't say anything bout my reply That's weird LMAO"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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