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Poet on Acid
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0 posted 2001-02-28 10:15 PM



Tears of blood
Forming a rampant dangerous flood
Bloody dreams
Full of horror pain and fearful screams
Dreams of pain
Robing the mind of hope and driving it insane
Under pains spell
Falling down into ones own personal hell
Too full of hate
Can't get rid of the hate, it's far too late

Not my best, but oh well.


>¶Øʆ<

© Copyright 2001 Tony Ryan Johnson - All Rights Reserved
HiddenSparklez
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1 posted 2001-02-28 11:22 PM


Not your best, but extremely strong. Can't ask for more outta a poem. Good job.

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

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2 posted 2001-02-28 11:31 PM


i agree, it definitely is very strong. Short, direct to the point, and very powerful. keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

jeremydraul
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State of Despair
3 posted 2001-03-01 12:26 PM


nothing wrong with it.. very prominent in its words...great description

JR


When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself...

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4 posted 2001-03-01 02:24 PM


Nicely done here.......powerful words.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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