Teen Poetry #4 |
Lurking Emptiness |
Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Lurking Emptiness: The kisses no longer mine. Lurking mist from below. Whispering shadows of time. This feeling I bestow. Fickle love of fantasy. A slow death that is true. Cliff of calm tranquility. The void I never knew. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
nice and short. A little sad though. great work. REgina |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
I really this, I think this is one of your best... short and to the point... thanks |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I have one thing to say...I hope to see you write about happiness with a girl soon You, as everyone else does, deserve to be happy "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
yah dopes, get a new chick man, you need it. such a sad tone in this poem...nice job with the description! JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Great poem it got straight to the point...Hope the right person come along soon..you deserve it.. ~Nikki~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Yo Javi. Carly really really liked this one. Make that 3 really's. No, 6 billion. INFINITE REALLY's!! Ok sure. So yeah. Nice. Very nice. ~Carly "Nature is not only all that is visible to the eye--it also includes the inner pictures of the soul." ~Edvard Munch |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yeah, it's a really good one Dopey. The feeling of it shows well, keep sharing them man. Please visit my webpage: http://lakewalker.homestead.com/index.html |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Thanks all! MUA! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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