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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2001-02-28 08:46 PM


Lurking Emptiness:


The kisses no longer mine.
Lurking mist from below.
Whispering shadows of time.
This feeling I bestow.

Fickle love of fantasy.
A slow death that is true.
Cliff of calm tranquility.
The void I never knew.





I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

© Copyright 2001 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
Ina
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1 posted 2001-02-28 08:50 PM


nice and short. A little sad though. great work.
REgina

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2 posted 2001-02-28 11:08 PM


I really this, I think this is one of your best... short and to the point... thanks
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3 posted 2001-02-28 11:35 PM


I have one thing to say...I hope to see you write about happiness with a girl soon You, as everyone else does, deserve to be happy

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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4 posted 2001-03-01 12:19 PM


yah dopes, get a new chick man, you need it. such a sad tone in this poem...nice job with the description!

JR


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5 posted 2001-03-01 02:20 AM


Great poem it got straight to the point...Hope the right person come along soon..you deserve it..
~Nikki~

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6 posted 2001-03-01 03:56 PM


Yo Javi. Carly really really liked this one. Make that 3 really's. No, 6 billion. INFINITE REALLY's!! Ok sure. So yeah. Nice. Very nice.
~Carly

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7 posted 2001-03-01 04:43 PM


Yeah, it's a really good one Dopey. The feeling of it shows well, keep sharing them man.

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8 posted 2001-03-03 12:24 PM


Thanks all!
MUA!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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