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Destroying Love.
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Destroying Love. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Destroying love. Destroy every moment wreck my every dream leave me in this torment leave this place unseen watch me for a weakness fill me full of pain I know you didn't seek this but your driving me insane I've watched your every move I know your little plan you know your going to lose but i'm still your biggest fan you constantly mistreat me but now i'm using you I want to set you free not until your heart is black and blue when you know this feeling and i've broken your heart in two when i've left you reeling then i'll fall in love with you. Marshal Zu. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was full of contradiction. WHat I understood is that you want to hurt this person so you can truly love him/her? That's quite odd, care to explain?  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I was gonna ask the same question. Why would you wanna do that to someone who you think you'd love later? Or are you doing this to fall in love with her? pls explain "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow~powerful. i guess maybe its a personal thing that only you can understand. although i know where you're coming from. great poem tho* dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Life is full of contradictions, and love as part of life has it's contradictions... I wanted to sort of express this... and I wanted to put down all those emotions that are bottled up inside me... I wanted to get my revenge... yet when I got my revenge I felt so good about it I fell in love again... or something like that... anyway thanx for all the comments... maybe I'm just too confused to explain it myself... so anyway thank you once again. Marshal Zu. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
Zu, You confuse me. lol, but then again, everything confuses me. but, I hope everything has gotten better for you.   *s* Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
powerful...well written...and i really liked the fact that you post and write...and different sujects...graet job...and keepw riting marsha  ...?i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-27-2001).] |
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
Well written, I love your poetry! I think I understood this poem, correct me if I'm wrong. I am guessing you hurt this person to show them what you are going through but then after you showed them you fell in love? Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Revenge is always good. This piece is filled with so much anger that it has the reader hooked all the way through. I really like the idea of teaching this person a lesson then falling in love. It shows just how tormented you are. Thank you for such a great read.  ~AF~ Know what you want. Become your real self. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I just re read this and I remember just how much I like this piece. Zu |
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