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Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2001-02-27 10:02 PM



Here, in Rome, all the ends are
lost,--.
all the roads here
crisscross
and merge.
Every thought ends up on
a cross,--
on each corner, there stands
a church.
Here, in Rome, every rock
is sacred,--
every street,
every acre
and block.
In every sculpture, a God stands
naked.
Heartbeat blends
with the beat
of the clock.
The shadows are cast on
a side,
awry.
Every shade appears
light
and vast.
The years
disappear
in a blink of an eye.
The remains, though, deny
the past.


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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2001-02-28 06:10 AM


"The years
disappear
in a blink of an eye.
The remains, though, deny
the past."

Nicely done Master ... a very thought-provoking read!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Dopey Dope
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Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2001-02-28 05:35 PM


Nicely done here, but I think that something was missing in this poem. It didn't have the magic like you do in the others.
Anyway, it's still better than what I could ever come up with!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies
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Twilight Zone
3 posted 2001-02-28 10:52 PM


Kit stole the one lines i was gonna quote
well done anyways master
keep em coming

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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