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MysticalAngel7
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since 2001-02-24
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0 posted 2001-02-25 09:58 PM


I feel scared
Helpless and vonorable
entraped by your love
Slowly giving in
My world is you
But without you
What would my life be?
Nothing
Mysterious? You are!
I truely love you
But do you love me
You say you do
But one stab
Has already been made
Deep and twisted
How much hurt
Can my heart endure
Why?
Why do I fall in love
And put myself through this?
I am so scared
One day may come
Happily in love...
The next...
Full of hurt and pain
Why are you my world?

* This is not one of my better writtings... just something I kinda threw together. So, It may not make much sense... I just wrote what I thought of at that time. *


Neither the angels in heaven above,Nor the demons down under the sea,can ever dissever my soul from the soul, of the beautiful Annabel Lee -E.A.Poe

© Copyright 2001 Carissa Clark - All Rights Reserved
DancinQueen
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Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
1 posted 2001-02-25 11:41 PM


not your best but still good...and its vulnerable just being critical! pretty good poem

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Acies
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2 posted 2001-02-26 07:30 PM


This might now be one of your best, but I'll still say that you still expressed your feelings real good on this one
thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2001-02-27 10:51 AM


I liked this. I thought it was pretty ok. I mean the sentiments within the poem were well express and for that I liked it. Still, not one of your best......but keep posting!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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