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MysticalAngel7 Junior Member
since 2001-02-24
Posts 20 |
Disappointment fills my life Because you continue to lie You said you'd be here for me But for some reason I cry Your hundreds of miles From my life You can't help me now With my pain and strife I can't handle much longer I see things coming to an end So many things have gone wrong Your not even here to be my best friend That's what your supposed to be right My dearest bestest friend Why aren't you here doing your job To see that my death doesn't win Can't you see my pain Don't you have that motherly sense Can't you tell when I'm contemplating death When things in life are becoming to tense But your not here To stop the pain,to nurture my heart Because things aren't good My life has been torn apart Where are you now We're supposed to be together You need to come back to stop me Before I end my life forever Your the one thing My happiness depends on But you ran away from me And now you're long gone My life seems empty My heart hurts for your love Where are you when I need you When things get real tough? *** Just to let you know... I am not suicidal and never was. It was just a way of expressing how I felt about my mom abandoning me.-Carissa *For that bright hope at last and that light time have past, and my worldly rest hath gone with a sight as it pass'd on, I care not tho' it perish wit |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh wow, this was quite the powerful poem. I liked it though. I felt the feeling of some frantic writing here. Like you just didn't know what to do. You came to a stop sign and just didn't know where to turn due to lack of guidance. Sorry your mom abandoned you, it sucks i know...... Stay strong  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
I'm so sorry!! This happens to soooo many people and I neverf understood how someone could just get up and leave someone's life forever, without even thinking of how this will effect the other person. Your poem was awesome! Keep up the great work!! Much Luv, ~*~S*W*E*E*T*S*T*U*F*F~*~ How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
I agree with Dopey, very good work. And very powerful. I like all your work I've read so far, so keep posting things! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've expressed some deep pain in this piece and I'm truly sorry that you are dealing with issues of abandonment. I'm glad to see by your note, that you are not truly suicidal. Please do note that we have guidelines within the forums that ask that you refrain from posting poetry that may glorify suicide or show it as a valid option. I felt that this piece was more an expression of your pain, and is not showing suicide as a valid option, but please do keep this in mind for future posts, as we do have members as young as 9 who visit these forums. Thank you for understanding, and I do hope you are able to work through these difficult issues. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I see Kim has already briefed you on this issue --- She's good ain't she  I'm sorry that you're going thru all this You've definitely expressed it clearly pls stay strong and hang in there thanks for sharing So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was very powerful as many others have already said. The pain of being is very deep and strong. but we all have to keep are head up, right? Regina |
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MysticalAngel7 Junior Member
since 2001-02-24
Posts 20 |
Thank you for all your comments. I appreciate them greatly. Just to explain alittle bit... I am coping with things with my mom quite well. I guess it would be easier if I hadn't ever known my mother(not that it makes anything easier).But I had a relationship with her and the she up and left me. I know she is somewhere in Arizona but I don't know where. She took my brother and sister with her. But left me with my aunt. I am happy here... Just times when I miss her. And times when I hate her for just leaving me. But, hurt and pain is a part of my life and I deal with it by writing poetry. So, I handle these times really well. I have written other poetry that is not so depressing or hurtful.. when I get a chance I will post more work... on a more happy note. Thanks again... Carissa Neither the angels in heaven above,Nor the demons down under the sea,can ever dissever my soul from the soul, of the beautiful Annabel Lee -E.A.Poe |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Very good! I liked! ~*~SCG~*~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
that was a poem from the heart i knoe wat it feels like i went through similar things but i believe u one of the strongest souls that will definity survive through all this... good poem keep writin  |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Wow great poem..I am sorry you are going through this difficult time, and I hope things get better soon. I went through a similar situation a few years ago and the only thing that can solve the pain is love and time. Good luck in future writings. ~Nikki~ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Great poem! This is very powerful, and the flow is great. I enjoyed the read. Keep posting! --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
great and powerful poem~ I'm sorry you have to feel this way. life's tough sometimes, but you know the saying..when life hands you a lemon, make lemonade keep your chin up..things will work out*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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