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Tamma
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0 posted 2001-02-24 09:19 PM


Sometymes, I wish I could dig into your thoughts,
Just so I could know what you think when you see me.

I wish you would tell me what’s on your mind,
Instead of hiding everything from me.

Sometymes if feels like you’re a mystery,
And that I must unreel you from your secrets.

You popped into my life so suddenly,
And have been a part of it ever since.

Now, my parents weren’t too happy,
When they heard about you.

They thought you were the reason,
Behind the breakup of Irvin and me.

I never spoke of you before the 13th,
Just another day of mystery.

Mystery surrounds you,
And has since the first tyme we spoke.




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Ina
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1 posted 2001-02-24 10:04 PM


Tamma, this was great. There was a story and u shrouded it in mystery....great work.
Regina

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2 posted 2001-02-24 11:02 PM


I liked the poem. Why did you create the alternate spelling on "Time?" That wasn't clear on me, but was obvious.
Good job, kiddo.
-Allan

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3 posted 2001-02-25 12:41 PM


Nicely done here tamma.....This poem was about me everybody. I'm a mystery to everybody.

Oooooo
Aaaaaa



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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sweetstuff101
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4 posted 2001-02-25 01:20 AM


Beeeeee~utyful!!! I luv it!!

Sometymes, I wish I could dig into your thoughts,
Just so I could know what you think when you see me.

sounds very familar lol!! Great job on this one, keep writing!

Much Luv,
~*~Sweetstuff~*~


How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it????


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5 posted 2001-02-25 12:14 PM


This is really good, I like how the tone is written into it.

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jeremydraul
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6 posted 2001-02-25 02:06 PM


Prolly ur 2nd best ive ever read, behind the butterfly poem...this was greatly expressed, thanks for sharing!

JR


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7 posted 2001-02-25 05:25 PM


well done again Tamma. You seem to have been improving. That I can see. Keep it up and don't stop sharing

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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8 posted 2001-02-25 09:14 PM


great job tamma and i just wanted to say that i LOVE your quote..ive wanted to say that forever. i love that movie..aww gives me goosbumps lol but neways, keep it up!!

*dq


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Ricky
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9 posted 2001-02-25 10:39 PM


Who's Irvin.

Really though. I liked it, as I like most of your stuff that's not about me in bad ways.

Tamma
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10 posted 2001-02-27 05:07 PM


library addition...
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