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When I look at you...
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When I look at you... |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
When I look at your sweet tender smile I see a person who’ll hold my heart `til I die A person who was really meant for me Who’ll let me be who I want to be A person who will never let me cry And looks at me with his sweet tender smile Reassuring me that everything’s going to be alright Making sure that everything I want is in sight With his rain of compassion And his light of perfection Nourishing me with every passing hour Protecting me like an exotic flower I’ll love you now and forever And this will change at one plus never Let’s always be together And never stray from one another Our hearts are one And together we’ll always have fun Knowing this, since before this day That we were meant for each other and there we’ll stay. Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity. |
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cutie2005 Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 148Bennett, Colorado USA |
Hey, this was a very great poem.. Its so cool that you know that person is the one for you!! Great way of writing it too!!! Glad to read and hope to read more!!! Luv ya, cutie If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very beautiful expressions of your feelings Starr "With his rain of compassion And his light of perfection Nourishing me with every passing hour" I love these lines So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Bravo! (sorry, I'm hyper right now) Seriously, though, that is excellent. With his rain of compassion And his light of perfection Nourishing me with every passing hour Protecting me like an exotic flower Just love it! ~Rhonda "I am Canadian" - Joe "When I find the right guy for me, I'll love him no matter what he does or what he's like" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Wondeful poem. I wish I could write love poetry. I tried once, but I assume it helps to be in love in the first place!  heheYou did an excellent job. -Allan The unintelligent are merely tools for the intelligent. That would make my house a veritable toolshed. ~~Allan Riverwood |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
 I like that verse the most myself. I'm glad you all like it, thanx. Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was quite the sweet one. Nicely done here. When I look at you I see peach trees and sun beams.... When I look at you I see me...yes I'm vain, oh well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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