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Tears of Glass
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 182
Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure

0 posted 2001-02-24 10:13 AM

Red, we were an amiable two
Blue, our tight days were few.
Green, how I longed for your approve
Black, within you only will I move.

Rainbows of a life shed in haste,
Strewn across my field of waste.
Tapestries torn all too soon
From bigger, then smaller room.

Pantry staples suffer in dust,
From neglect and spite amidst lust.
Mirrors cracked, or covered, or both,
Never again to warm imagining youth.

Empty, cold, pervades a bed,
Too comforting, hence ignored,
In the war of her ambiguity.
Forevermore relinquished of pretty..

Love left lonely and aloof,
Shelved along with rational proof
Of worth, world, purpose, and family.
Destitution of likeness has invaded this anomaly.

*Jennifer

"My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see."

Elvenblood
Member

since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

1 posted 2001-02-24 10:40 AM

That's quite the moving piece there. Thought provoking too.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

2 posted 2001-02-24 02:58 PM

Probably one of your best theat i've read.
you did a marvelous job on this one Jenn

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-02-25 12:01 PM

Well I liked it, but not as much as some of your others. A bit of a change though within the form of your expression. I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

4 posted 2001-03-01 04:40 PM

WOW. Ok...wow. I loved this.....

~Carly

"Nature is not only all that is visible to the eye--it also includes the inner pictures of the soul." ~Edvard Munch

jeremydraul
Senior Member

since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

5 posted 2001-03-01 06:48 PM

it was real good... the theme was awesome but with all due respect, your rhyme scheme was off a little.. just a little suggestion. Other than that it was delighting

JR

When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself...

Neokrew
Member

since 2000-12-24

Posts 60
VA

6 posted 2001-03-05 03:23 PM

hey babe,

Good poem even though I am slow and did not quite get it you know I have been talking to chester peoplt to long just kidding love ya

--Neo

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