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Chel
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Baltimore, MD, USA

0 posted 2001-02-23 06:44 PM


You said you would always be here
I believed you
Lie after Lie
Hit after Hit
You seemed different when I met you
now you seem distant
I found out you were cheating
Lie after Lie
Hit after Hit
Finally I left
Thought I was free
You found me
Told me you changed
Lie after Lie
Hit after Hit
I stood by your side
You turned on me
Lie after Lie
Hit after Hit


Sorry I haven't been around, I have been very busy, and didn't have anything to write. So tell me what you think.
Your friend, Chel



"True friends stab you in the front"
"Never say 'I Love You' unless you mean it"



[This message has been edited by Chel (edited 02-24-2001).]

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Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-02-23 07:35 PM


This was a great poem. "Lie after lie, hit after hit." That really did something for me when I read it...
Great job.
-Allan

The unintelligent are merely tools for the intelligent. That would make my house a veritable toolshed. ~~Allan Riverwood

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2 posted 2001-02-24 12:13 PM


I thought this was well written. It sucks that you had to write the poem though due to the situation that occurred.
A wonderful read though!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Chel
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3 posted 2001-02-24 11:25 AM


I am glad that you enjoyed reading it. I hope that you read more of my work someday soon.

Chel


"True friends stab you in the front"
"Never say 'I Love You' unless you mean it"


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4 posted 2001-02-24 02:50 PM


it's good to see you back Chel
nice to see you sharing your poems again
You've narrated your feelings real well on this one
hope things get better for you
keep sharing


So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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