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TrueLUV
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0 posted 2001-02-23 12:56 PM



Ghetto child
Do I need to remind you
Just being born was an obstacle
Nevermind a mothers addiction
Ghetto child
Don't get me wrong she tried to raise her baby right
But the virus inside her took her life
And left her baby to rot
Ghetto child
Growing up wasn't easy
selling rock on the corner
Just to go home with a loaf of bread and a gallon of water
Ghetto child
A man now the life path is chosen
Making money on the corner paid off no joking
Now I've got a baby of my own
But he'll never see me home
I am behind bars, locked up for life dang my mother had it easy
Atleast she got to see her ghetto child before she past
And now I sit here; wondering if she could would she see her ghetto child at last




[This message has been edited by TrueLUV (edited 02-23-2001).]

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jeremydraul
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1 posted 2001-02-23 12:10 PM


i think i learned a lesson from this, very good job writting this!

JR


When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself...

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2 posted 2001-02-23 11:21 PM


life can be really cruel...but in the end, it's still up to us to change it. hand in there...be strong

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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3 posted 2001-02-25 12:23 PM


I think acire is right, but sometimes there's just no other way I guess....some of us are forced into a crappy life.

Greatly written here. Tons of truth in this.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Isabel Galaxia
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4 posted 2001-02-25 10:44 AM


This is great! It sounds kind of like something Lauryn Hill would write....
Bel

Ina
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5 posted 2001-02-25 12:06 PM


very intersting poem. i liked it alot. very straight forward. I learned a lesson. be strong.
Regina

Allan Riverwood
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6 posted 2001-02-25 03:07 PM


Wow... this is an excellent poem. The ending is superb.
I am putting it in my library.
-Allan

The unintelligent are merely tools for the intelligent. That would make my house a veritable toolshed. ~~Allan Riverwood

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