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Angelwings
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0 posted 2001-02-22 05:15 PM


You came to me in my dreams last night
with your big brown eyes and long eyelashes.
You smiled that smile that lit up my day.
As you took me by the hand
we talked of the memories that we shared.
You grinned as I told you stories
I told you how my life had changed
since that day I had to say goodbye.
We talked of how I couldn't move on
of how your smile still lit my way,
of the way I'd awaken with you on my mind.
I told you how my heart hasn't healed
how I can't move on, how you're the one.
You took me in your arms so tight
whispered to me you loved me, too.
Told me to stay put and wait for you
when you are ready you will come.
But never give up and to always remember
"I love you, dear Chelsea, eternally".
With those words I awoke once more.
With your image in my heart and mind.
To begin another day of my journey
to the day my love will return to me.

© Copyright 2001 Chelsea Thompson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-02-23 12:09 PM


I think my heart just fell on the floor
I really like this poem a lot
thanks for sharing it

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So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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2 posted 2001-02-23 10:19 AM


i liked this. and im with acire, i think my heart just fell on the floor. truly heart-touching. great job

*dq


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3 posted 2001-02-23 04:33 PM


3 hearts on the floor! This was a beautiful, tender poem, and very well-written. Thanks for posting!

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Angelwings
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4 posted 2001-02-23 06:04 PM


Thank you very much for your kind words and I'm glad that my poem touched you. I think the best thing about these forums is the fact that it makes you realize that you are not the only one having the feelings you have. Thank you for reading my work and good luck in future writings.
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5 posted 2001-02-23 07:11 PM


This really is a touching poem...
You write love poetry well. I have nothing to comment on, this is as good as it is going to get.
Talk to you later.
-Allan

The unintelligent are merely tools for the intelligent. That would make my house a veritable toolshed. ~~Allan Riverwood

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6 posted 2001-02-23 11:54 PM


OH wow........my heart has fallen too.....i think this should go in the book of records....or something.
well anyway, very lovely poem!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-02-24 01:07 AM


Thank you both River and Dopey Dope! I appreciate your kind words Allen. I do find love poetry easier to write than other types. Perhaps I'm just easily inspired by it. Good luck in future writing.
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8 posted 2001-02-24 01:10 AM


edit~I spelled Allan's name wrong. My apologies I just noticed.
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9 posted 2001-06-11 03:24 AM


wow!...this is a very heartfelt poem...touching to the heart...i think you did a...beautiful job...on expressing your feelings...thanks for sharing ...bye Chelsea

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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10 posted 2001-06-11 04:02 AM


Chezlee...
This one is really good....it is very beautiful..my heart too hit ground but that prolly doesnt surprise you....
Great job on the poem..I was really impressed because this one had a more positive sounding *sign* to it...you know how I can pick these things up....
Love you
~Nikki~

[This message has been edited by Shygirl82 (edited 06-11-2001).]

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11 posted 2001-06-11 10:55 AM


Thanks for the great read this really was very touching  
Zu

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12 posted 2001-06-11 04:14 PM


Chelsea~ those big brown eyes will do it every time   I liked this very much    ~SEA
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13 posted 2001-06-11 05:33 PM


Excellent. I know that pain. Keep writing!!
Rhonda

"Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy."

Angelwings
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14 posted 2001-06-11 07:17 PM


Thank you all for your words!

*that what does not kill us makes us stronger!*

*Everyone can deal with pain in their own way, some things are just harder than others!*

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