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jeremydraul
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0 posted 2001-02-22 04:39 PM


Eh, I know its weak... shoot me.

‘Technological Dance’

Bass beating abruptly
Through thickness of mind
Strobe and lights flicker
As groups are entwined

Arms flaring out
To the rhythm of sound
Bodies beating fast
With neons all around

Slick steps of dance
Collaborate the crowd
Area of acrobatics
Circle in the clouds

Us, body to body
Dashingly dancing on
We won’t think to stop
‘Til the techno's gone

Jeremy D Raulinaitis



When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself...

© Copyright 2001 Jeremy Daniel Raulinaitis - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-02-22 04:51 PM


Music can have an amazing affect on all of us, but it must be 10 times more for dancers. You describe it well. Thanks for posting.



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2 posted 2001-02-22 09:29 PM


aww a tribute to the dancers Awesome..i for one would die without music, its such a huge part of my life with dance and all, thanks for the poem

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anonymousfemale
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3 posted 2001-02-22 09:40 PM


Ahh yeah..I love this feeling. There is nothing like techno shooting through you at a rave.

This is going to the library Jer. The memories it brings back is pretty damn sweet.

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4 posted 2001-02-23 06:26 PM


Let's all go clubbin
Let's start here in Chicago
We got THE clubs

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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5 posted 2001-02-23 06:27 PM


Let's all go clubbin
Let's start here in Chicago
We got THE clubs

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Chel
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6 posted 2001-02-23 06:47 PM


Great poem. I haven't been here in a while so you might not remember me. I hope you keep up the good work.

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7 posted 2001-02-24 12:10 PM


I thought that this was just fine cept you need some punctuation because the reader doesn't know when to stop or keep going.
Other than that, good.



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