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Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19
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0 posted 2001-02-19 01:47 AM



Are you pretending to love me?
Are you pretending to care?
Cause everytime I really need you...you just arent there.

I feel so safe and warm wrapped in your arms..and I just cant help but to fall for your charm.

My knees go week with your kisses so sweet. As you look deep in my eyes I can feel our hearts beat.

But this only lasts for a moment in time. Then you go back to her and are no longer mine. I thought I could take it, I thought I was strong...but i now know in my heart that this is just wrong.

If you decide that you love me, If you decide that you care...just let me know...I will always be there.


© Copyright 2001 Nikki - All Rights Reserved
HiddenSparklez
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since 2000-12-29
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British Columbia, Canada
1 posted 2001-02-19 02:06 AM


Good first poem.. lots of emotion. Keep writing. Hope your situation improves.

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17
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Maine, USA
2 posted 2001-02-19 09:14 AM


Oh, it's wonderful! Very good emotion. Keep writing.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Acies
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3 posted 2001-02-19 11:48 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

I'm glad to see you've decided to join our family of friends here in Passions for Poetry. Hope you enjoy your stay, so happy posting and reading.

ps. pls check you email

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2001-02-19 01:50 PM


Welcome to Passions
Good job on your first post here! I hope you enjoy your stay in these forums


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Angelwings
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since 1999-08-27
Posts 222
IL, USA
5 posted 2001-02-19 07:42 PM


Wonderful job and great emotion. I'm glad to see you in Passions. You'll learn it's a great place to be. Good luck in your future writing.
DancinQueen
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6 posted 2001-02-19 09:14 PM


great poem~ ive felt this one. when ure not quite sure if they're being real or if ure just another grl to add to their list. sucks, but dont let yourself get attatched if you suspect this, bc your instinct is almost always right

**Welcome to Passion's btw **

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Dopey Dope
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7 posted 2001-02-19 09:22 PM


Welcome to passions!
I liked this poem a lot. You've displayed the amount of love you have for this person. Let me tell you something though......as crappy as it might seem......you won't always be there. Constant lonliness, and depression due to this unrequited love you are experiencing will inevitably cause you to just need to stop.....stop loving that person. Thus you'll have to move on.....
Great post....



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Tears of Glass
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since 2000-12-04
Posts 182
Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure
8 posted 2001-02-22 09:13 PM


I got to this one kind of late, but...

Welcome to Passions!!!!!

Awesome first post! Keep posting...

*Jennifer

"My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see."

Alwye
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In the space between moments
9 posted 2001-02-22 10:19 PM


Wonderful first post, welcome to passions! I hope to see much more of you here!

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

keoni
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
10 posted 2001-02-23 10:57 AM


Great Post. Dopey hit this one right on! You try to always be there, but it doesn't work. Your body can only take so much. I began trying to be there a year ago, but I just can't take anymore. If you don't receive, you'll end up not giving anymore,to anyone in my case.Good luck and great post.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
11 posted 2001-02-23 12:12 PM


Woops... a late arrival. But it was certainly a pleasure to read. You write a very continous and sincere poem. It really fills the heart! Welcome to the land of poetry and friends...

JR


When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself...

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