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Starr
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0 posted 2001-02-18 09:39 PM


Have you ever hurt so much you wanted to die?
Your body, soul and heart all wanted to cry.
'Cause I felt that way when I saw you today,
But not to show my pain I put a smile on display.

Probably if she wasn’t my friend,
That smile could have been genuine.
Why did you have to be this way?
Couldn’t you, from my life, just stay away?

As you walked into the room and called her,
It was as though everything became a blur.
My heart felt like it was shattered,
‘Cause she was the one, now to be flattered.

I guess deserved this painful feeling,
‘Cause I hurt you and you were still healing.
You might of just wanted to get back at me,
But my friend did not deserve the hurt that was to be.

I am dreadfully sorry for your pain,
But your trying to hurt me, did not go in vain.
I now see that I did care for you, like you cared for me,
But fate has made sure that we would never be.

© Copyright 2001 Sheriza Mahabirsingh - All Rights Reserved
Elvenblood
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1 posted 2001-02-18 09:59 PM


Oh, I love this!! I'm gonan put this in my library and send it to this one person I KNOW has lived it. thanks!!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2001-02-19 12:01 PM


Very nicely done here. I thought that this was sad though. I mean.....geesh......talk about a tough situation.....Hope you get through it.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Angel in Flight
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3 posted 2001-02-19 12:57 PM


This is a very strong and emotional poem that I must commend you on. I have been in this situation many times, but I promise in the end everything will turn out for the best. I wont say it will be the conclusion you wanted, but it will be for the best. Goodluck with this situation.

Love Always~*~AMANDA~*~

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4 posted 2001-02-19 03:12 PM


very well expressed sentiments
i hate to see anyone in Passions hurt
hope things get better for you
stay strong


So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

DancinQueen
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5 posted 2001-02-19 03:17 PM


definetly in my library. great piece..

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

~sugarpie313~
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6 posted 2001-02-21 05:11 PM


this is soooooooooo good!!!! i too have lived this... sad but true *sniff sniff* ok but enuf about me... this was well written and i thought it was a bit of a twist for me the last stanza... i thought you'd say something nasty about the person at the end but i like it as well!! hehehe
GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!!

~VALERIE~

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

Starr
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7 posted 2001-02-22 02:42 PM


Thanx for the support. It's never easy, it's always hard , but I'm getting through it .

Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity.

Tears of Glass
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8 posted 2001-02-22 08:48 PM


This one's going straight to my library.. VERY well done.

*Jennifer

"My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see."

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