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Angel in Flight
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0 posted 2001-02-17 09:02 PM


Lost within a world of dreams.
Meanwhile blackness entwines your soul.
A location at which place dreams are fabricated purely to be let go.

A dungeon of self...
where nonexistence you unconditionally see.
A place that you withdraw to when
you are feeling uncontrollably empty.

Vanquished within a world of hopes,
Which utterly atomizes by the day.
A location where you journey to when
entirely everyone else concludes to stray.

A cavern of skepticism,
trepidation and remorse.
Where you perceive your life again,
And have the audacity to commence once more your course.



Life is like a storm, it passes you by without even knowing it~Amanda

© Copyright 2001 Amanda - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-02-17 09:06 PM


Outstanding poem! WOW!
I loved it... I only hope that others can see it as I did, considering I know a bit more about it beforehand.
Still, you did excellent on this! Absolutely magnificent!
Library, here you go.
-Allan

When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda

Elvenblood
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2 posted 2001-02-17 09:07 PM


Oh wow, I LOVE YOU! (Buddy sort of way) You Expalin what happens to me so well!! and i'm sure it happens to others, but I write for a release when I get like that. You're great!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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3 posted 2001-02-18 11:31 AM


I thought this was good.....but it wasn't as good as your other one. Still, very nice work


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-02-18 04:52 PM


I see you've done a lot better recently
you've grown with your writing
good for you
thanks for the read

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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