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ixteme
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0 posted 2001-02-16 11:53 PM


heartless

standing still, cold and wet
shivering in the darkness
i seem to become colder
as you pass me by
teeth chattering
knees knocking
heart pounding
mind failure
you cross through my path of ungreatfulness
you break the lock of loving on your way through
mindlessness insanity im going crazy
just drive a stake through my heart to end me
tear open my heart that is no longer needed
you can just shred it to a billion pieces
you make it so hard for me to love again
the love i could give to someone special
save your breath
i dont need the crap
the crap you've givin me all along
the heart breaking
crazyness ive been suffering from
you are nothing but a heartless soul



[This message has been edited by ixteme (edited 02-18-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-02-18 01:37 AM


I understand this well.......I can't believe nobody has replied to this.....let alone any moderators read this one. This just goes to show you how people are being very lazy here.
Nice one.



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Elvenblood
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2 posted 2001-02-18 10:18 AM


Wow, I really like this! It's realy dramatic, the emotion's so thick you could cut it :-) This is a truly fantastic work, it should be published. Just don't let a conservative edit the book or paper k?

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

ixteme
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3 posted 2001-02-18 12:31 PM


thanks i dont think n e 1 was aloud to reply cause of the cussing they emailed me and told me i have to take it off but i dont know how haha... www.ixteme.musicpage.com
peace
pete

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4 posted 2001-02-18 11:07 PM


If you look at the pad w/ a pencil icon, that should allow you to edit your post. But you only have 24 hrs from the time you posted it. If not, contact any of the forum moderators, and they'll edit it for you.

hope that helps

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So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

DancinQueen
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5 posted 2001-02-19 12:20 PM


i know how you feel, regretfully, sucks. thats all there is to it, but dont hold yourself back from loving again, because the person that hurt you will succeed in ruining you, and you're better then that

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

[This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 02-19-2001).]

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6 posted 2001-02-19 04:59 PM


Wow. That was beautifully written. I totally love the way you were able to express the feelings that were going on inside of you. I'm glad you realised what was happening before it was too late

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Shygirl82
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7 posted 2001-02-19 10:29 PM


Wow great poem..it truly brought tears to my eyes. I am glad you reaized and came to your senses before it was too late.
ixteme
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8 posted 2001-02-19 10:51 PM


thank you, thank you
if n e 1 wants to talk to me i have
aol instant messanger: jncoman003
icq: 31466899
or email me: slipknotfreak247@hotmail.com www.ixteme.musicpage.com
peace
pete

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