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sweetcollege_girl
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0 posted 2001-02-16 06:46 PM


Silent tears fall
Down her face
In steady streams
Of eternal grace

One by one
They all fall down
Gathering in a pool
In the crook of a frown

She wipes them away
Yet still more appear
All her feelings are trapped
Within a single tear

Standing alone
She faces her fears
Yet she's still crying
Her silent tears

Feb. 09, 2001


~*~SCG~*~

© Copyright 2001 Lavada Miller - All Rights Reserved
angelberry
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since 2001-02-16
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1 posted 2001-02-16 09:14 PM


that's cute but sad poem. and you don't tell what she's crying about, you just mention fears...which can be anything, so anyone could connect with this poem, i like it.
jeremydraul
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State of Despair
2 posted 2001-02-16 11:35 PM


rolled on quite nicely, i enjoyed it very much

Jeremy


Life is fading me away, far away, but I’m sketching myself back, line by line, mark by mark.

Acies
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3 posted 2001-02-17 04:56 PM


this is really sad
i hope you're doing better
if it helps --- keep sharing
be strong

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14
Posts 375
Maine, USA
4 posted 2001-02-17 06:10 PM


this one was very good. i hope that this is not you but if it is, sharing always helps!
keep writing, your very talented. i like the flow, makes it easy to read.

~VALERIE~

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17
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5 posted 2001-02-17 08:23 PM


That's amazing. I absolutely LOVE IT! Like Val said, I hope it's not you, but if it is: such talent can either be hampered or propelled by such pain, work it into a wire, and pull happiness to you.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Dopey Dope
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6 posted 2001-02-18 11:57 AM


Very very good poem. I felt the pain within this poem. You write very well, but once again, I hope everything is ok.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jytree
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since 2000-01-26
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7 posted 2001-02-18 04:49 PM


With ever tear morun now less,
Istead place you head upon my chest,
Let me wisper in your ears,
And by doing this we saw shatter all fears.

Hey I miss you alot and will be glad to see you again WHEN it happens.



Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



sweetcollege_girl
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since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
8 posted 2001-02-21 06:39 PM


Jay, you are so sweet!

Thanks all for the replies..Once again, this poem is not about me...But thanks for the concern!

I'm not sure if Chic had told ya'll yet, but Rick and I are expecting a little bundle of joy ourselves! If ya'll want to, ya'll can write a poem for it! I plan on putting all the donations in a scrapbook! Isn't that a cool idea? Talk to ya'll later!

~*~SCG~*~

sweetcollege_girl
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since 1999-12-03
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9 posted 2001-03-01 02:41 PM


*bump*

~*~SCG~*~

Lakewalker
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10 posted 2001-03-01 05:04 PM


Good job on the poem scg, bumping doesn't quite work the same now that there is new software. it no longer moves the poem up when the author replies to it, it only changes the color of the folder to a grey and puts it on the "todays topics" page.

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