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Drowning Me

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Zsolt
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0 posted 02-16-2001 01:18 PM       View Profile for Zsolt   Email Zsolt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zsolt

This is my first post here. I'd just like to share a poem I wrote, with you guys. I'm not sure if I'm gonna post more after this, because I write lyrics, mainly (and music to go with them). We'll see. Anyway, here it is.

Drowning me

Drown me, my love, in your precious blue eyes,
Pull me down again, then make my soul rise.
Make me see the dream I was dreaming so deep,
When I was, once again, awaken from my sleep.

Your love, like an endless blue ocean,
That fills the void deep inside my heart,
And your look so full of emotion,
Make me forget, that life can be (is) hard.

The sound of your laughter makes me feel great,
So full of love, there's no room left for hate.
I've chosen to love you, because that's how I feel,
That's how I know, my life is real.

Although there's no ground below my feet,
No roof above my head,
Somehow I feel, with you by my side,
I won't end up dead.


Well, this is one of my two poems that I've written to go without music. There are some deep stuff in it, but I'm sure you'll all figure out what I wanted to say. If you don't, I won't explain them to you. That's the beauty of poetry, isn't it?
© Copyright 2001 Varszegi Zsolt - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-16-2001 01:25 PM       View Profile for Lakewalker   Email Lakewalker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lakewalker

Welcome to Passions
This was such a great first post, I'm very impressed. The flow of your poem is excellent I hope that you do post more for us to read, you can post song lyrics if you want, after all, they are poetry.



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2 posted 02-16-2001 02:20 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Welcome to Passions! This is a beautiful first post. You're very lucky to have someone like this in your life, and you describe it well. Thanks for sharing.

PS-Check your e-mail!


"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli
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3 posted 02-16-2001 02:26 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Very nicely done here on this one! i thought this was very well written. I surely do hope to see you post more.......we post song lyrics here too, so if you'd like to do that then ok.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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I admire it daily
Zsolt
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4 posted 02-16-2001 02:38 PM       View Profile for Zsolt   Email Zsolt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zsolt

Well, thanks for the positive reactions everyone. It's a very nice site, with nice, creative people on it, so I'll keep visiting it.
P.S.: Lovebug, if only things were how they seem to be. But why wouldn't one dream of it? Maybe it will happen this way.

[This message has been edited by Zsolt (edited 02-16-2001).]
Starr
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5 posted 02-16-2001 06:39 PM       View Profile for Starr   Email Starr   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starr

I love this.... you could really express your self... Lyrics or not it's beautiful... So keep posting!!
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6 posted 02-16-2001 08:06 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

very expressive....You can post all your lyrics in here. Just follow the guidelines of PIP. A lot of members show their song writing bailities and post their lyrics. So, it's ok. keep sharing

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So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.
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7 posted 02-16-2001 11:59 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Well written first post, welcome to Passions! I hope to see much more poetry and song lyrics too! I'm getting into song writing, so I love seeing how other people express themselves through music...anyways, enjoy yourself here!

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
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8 posted 02-17-2001 09:24 PM       View Profile for Angel in Flight   Email Angel in Flight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel in Flight

May I say WOW!!! This is such a touching poem and is going straight tword my library. Your new?? well then, WELCOME TO YOUR "FRIENDLY" FAMILY!!! I cant believe you are new this is a great first post. Congrats on this poem and please stay with us we need you here. WElCOME AGAIN MY FRIEND!!

Life is like a storm, it passes you by without even knowing it~Amanda
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First off lemme just say WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! Im shur that you'll enjoy it here just as much as the rest of us do! Great first post and i look forward to reading more from you!! Great job and keep em comin!
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10 posted 02-22-2001 08:12 PM       View Profile for Tears of Glass   Email Tears of Glass   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tears of Glass

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!

Great first post! You seem to be a talented writer. I think I'm going to like you! You're lucky to have someone in your life you love so much. Greatt expression.. this is a job very well done. And again, welcome!

*Jennifer

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11 posted 02-22-2001 10:29 PM       View Profile for DancinQueen   Email DancinQueen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DancinQueen

WELCOME!!!!! this was absolutly beautiful. id love to hear your poems to music sometime. i wish i could do the music part..but im not that talented im afraid I hope you like it here at passions, and i hope you post more bc id love to read some more of your work

*dq


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12 posted 02-24-2001 08:02 PM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

Uh, WOW!!! That is just... words can't describe. I'm speechless. Oh yeah, welcome to Passions! That was just amazing...

~Rhonda


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13 posted 12-11-2001 09:24 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

This is so beautiful, Zsolt! The imagery was exceptional. The way you write is so mesmorising. I have to add this to my library. It makes me think of better days to be had in the future and the great ones of the past.  

Keep sharing!

~AF~

"Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier

 
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