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StratMatt
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0 posted 2001-02-16 09:42 AM



As we have witnessed, here on this day,
Love is alive and here to stay
Upon it they shall always stand
And proclaim their love before every land.

Mountains shall fall, rivers shall dry
Before their love, either denies
It shall always stand ever so tall
Like a colossus that never falls

These two hearts have melded and now are as one
Together Forever their life has begun
To have and to hold, and cherish each other
To live and to learn and to love one another.


© Copyright 2001 Matthew Talken - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-02-16 02:06 PM


how sweet.....very very sweet poem here. A wonderful display of true love and the bond formed together once married.
Nicely done.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Dark Enchantress
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2 posted 2001-02-16 02:54 PM


Love is beautiful, and so is this poem. I wish them (and you) the best of luck.

and in the end
we still pretend
the time we spend
not knowing when
we're finally free
and you could be
-NIN "The Wretched"

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3 posted 2001-02-16 10:09 PM


What A wonderful piece and Great tribute to them both. You truly showed the power and meaning of love in this piece. Into the library shall this one go until I need a spiritul boost of love into my soul. Wonderful once again.

Life is like a storm, it passes you by without even knowing it~Amanda

jeremydraul
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4 posted 2001-02-16 11:38 PM


wow, nice tribute, your work is very good, cant wait to see more

Jeremy


Life is fading me away, far away, but I’m sketching myself back, line by line, mark by mark.

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5 posted 2001-02-17 01:33 PM


Great job on this poem! Did they love it??

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6 posted 2001-02-17 03:15 PM


Oh. Love. How sweet...
Marriage sounds so permanent, tied down to one person you're lifetime...and yet it sounds inviting.
Good luck to your brother and sister-in law.
Nice writing..

xoxo
Jenn


"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia




[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 02-17-2001).]

~sugarpie313~
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7 posted 2001-02-17 06:18 PM


this is very touching! I wish i could have written something like this when my sister got married. I wish you all the best of luck. (Did they like the poem??)

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

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8 posted 2001-02-17 07:10 PM


wonderful tribute to your brother and sister-in-law
they must be really proud of what you've written
thanks for sharing

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

StratMatt
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9 posted 2001-02-17 09:24 PM


Well, before it was also a tribute to my brother, because my brother and I are very obviously brothers and I've been called "Bill" and been compared to him so many times that it's kind of annoying, but I had one line in there that said, Even though I don't like being called 'Bill', there's no one I would rather be mistaken for or compared to. They loved it, and in fact, the maid of honor originally planned to give a toast, but after hearing mine, decided she didn't want to follow, I didn't find that out until later though, hehe.

Actually, also being a college kid with too many bills and not enough money, I actually wrote the poem in calligraphy and had it custom framed as their gift, only cost me about $30 altogether, and its been hanging on their wall ever since.


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