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Starr
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0 posted 2001-02-14 08:40 PM


I have never known I could care so dearly,
For someone lik you, I have seen so rarely.
Every day I watch you go by,
And under my breath I let out a sigh.
I know that we aren't really friends,
But wo's to say love doesn't go round bends.

Each day I want to talk to you,
But I tell myself it's not what I should do.
Because I am afraid of what you might say,
And I'll turn my face and run away.
My head tells me where to go,
But my heart tells me what, I wish not know.

Please tell me you understand,
And know I am not here to demand.
I have to tell you this now, so I can ease my pain,
And I'm not sure I'll say it again.
If you are noble and know what's right,
Then don't make this look like a hopless plight.

My heart is in the right place I know,
But only that, will not make your feelings show.
So tell me if you care for me,
The way that I wish it to be.
Love is true, love is pure,
And if you love me then you'll know for sure.

© Copyright 2001 Sheriza Mahabirsingh - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-02-14 08:49 PM


Nice! Lovely Valentine's post.
It is difficult to be in such a situation, but you expressed your emotions clearly and elegantly. The rhyme scheme was simple, and it complimented the poem very nicely.
Welcome to Passions. I hope to see you post more. For now, check out Jeremy's challenge. That might be a nice way to get to know us a bit better.
-Allan

When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda

Angel in Flight
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2 posted 2001-02-14 08:54 PM


Starr~ Beautiful poem and wonderful first post!!! All I wish to say to you is Follow your heart even if your head tells you otherwise. Sometimes your eyes as well as mind can play games on you but your heart can not lie. Good luck with this and love always. I know you will enjoy it here as much as I do. OH!! OH !!WELCOME TO THE FAMILY!!!!

Life is like a storm, it passes you by without even knowing it~Amanda

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3 posted 2001-02-14 09:25 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

beautiful beautiful beautiful
I love it

Thanks for deciding to join our family of friends. Hope you feel at home and enjoy your stay You should find everyone in here willing to help and nice to talk to. Hope to see more of your poems

ps. pls check you email

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Starr
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4 posted 2001-02-14 11:02 PM


Thanx for the welcome and support.... i know I'll love it here.Thanx again!!!
GirlsBestFriend
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5 posted 2001-02-15 07:24 AM


Welcome to Passions!
this poem is lovely. good job is what you've done here. best wishs for u and I'm waiting to read more, ok?

~lotsa luv


"Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world"

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
6 posted 2001-02-15 08:29 AM


Uh, welcome to passions! We're glad to have you here! Anyways, I think me and you will be great friends, because this poem you wrote here, is what I feel right now. Well, c-ya around passions~
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7 posted 2001-02-15 07:21 PM


Nice job here, a wonderful post for the v-day mood. I welcome you to our wonderful home of poetry.
Hope you like it here!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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8 posted 2001-02-16 01:29 PM


Welcome to Passions
Great job of expressing yourself in this first post of yours I hope you stay and post some more!


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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