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Jeremy's Haiku Challenge -- Leaves of Hearts
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Jeremy's Haiku Challenge -- Leaves of Hearts |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Leaves of Hearts Serated edges Passion's colors overcome Flaunting leaves of hearts So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. [This message has been edited by acire (edited 02-15-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Good job! I think that it is interesting how you worded it... "leaves of hearts" Pluralizing each one. Made me think as though you were referring to a group of people. Challenge well met. -Allan When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here........I actually liked this one haha....haiku's......very hard to write in my opinion.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
wow...Dopey likes my poem  So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow, that was also one of the best challenges, thanks! Jeremy Life is fading me away, far away, but I’m sketching myself back, line by line, mark by mark. |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Beeeeee~utiful!!! Lol! I luv it!! Keep up the great work! And keep postin'!! Luv Always, ~*~Priscilla~*~ PS~ Happy day after Valentine's Day!!! How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Acire: This haiku is an interesting blend between technical aspects of nature and the overal properties of it. I think it's quite an impressive poem. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yup yup, it's a good one  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I agree with the others, this is good. I'm going to ask you for permission to publish this in Digital Passions. Just let me know!  |
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