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StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

0 posted 2001-02-12 11:29 PM

blindly trudging through
the delusions of life
I break away
from the mentally altered
realities of my misconceptions
and thought generated understandings
My childish reasonings now
s h a t t e r e d
by truth or fiction (i don't know)
as society depicts a false
serenity
within our flaws substituted by
vanity

"Tell me why you cry"

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

1 posted 2001-02-12 11:33 PM

hey chick

great poem, as usual. i love all yours, keep posting! and stay in touch

*dq

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-02-12 11:40 PM

Nifty.  And I haven't used that word in Passions before, it applies here.
I like what you did with the lines 8 and 9... where you broke up the word "shattered" like that.
Also the parenthesis... i have never used them in poetry.  they make a neat effect.
Great job!  Loved it.
-Allan

When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-02-13 02:51 PM

Now this is my kind of poem. VERY well written and nicely done. I liked this!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-02-13 05:24 PM

BRAVO BRAVO BRAVO
I love it
great expressions Jessica
you deserve a standing ovation

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

LucidityNow
Member

since 2001-02-06

Posts 118
Canada

5 posted 2001-02-14 01:53 AM

wow, this was just beautiful
s h a t t e r e d
that was great. good work.

and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me...

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

6 posted 2001-02-15 10:06 PM

Hey, I like the poem a lot. I still have it in my library from when you posted it as "Reality Bites!" in Teen #3. Thanks for posting it again, it's really well done

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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