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Tears of Glass
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Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure

0 posted 2001-02-12 10:20 PM


Grasping Thoughts

The inside of my head is all in a whirl,
Too many thoughts for just one young girl.
I grab onto a few but can’t catch them all,
I’m losing my grip and I’m starting to fall.

Everything in here is backwards and sad,
Just observing the scene I begin to go mad.
I hear the thunderous beating of my tearstained heart,
It’s felt too much and it's coming apart.

The mindsets are coming and going so fast,
As I try desperately to make one of them last.
Each one that I reach for I just barely miss,
Inches from happiness, seconds from bliss.

I close my eyes and I stretch out my mind
To catch one idea that my emotions can find
I feel one take hold and my brain hangs on tight
I don't stop and look to see if it's right.

I throw myself into the concept I've caught
Not examining the logic of this single thought
I'm determined to reach it whatever the cost
I'm sure it will be worth the things I'll have lost.

Embarrassed, I keep my failures quite hidden from view
I work at it in secret and hide my success, too
I'm alone with my idea and happy this way
No one wants to hear it and I don't know what to say.

With each failure I am devastated and consumed by guilt
Feeling weak and worthless I watch my heart slowly wilt
I was not aware of the pain I'd be in
When I reached out and held on to the fateful word: ‘THIN.’

*Jennifer




"My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see."

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer M. - All Rights Reserved
DancinQueen
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1 posted 2001-02-12 11:30 PM


wow! great poem. i really liked it, goin straight to my library     keep it up

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Angel in Flight
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2 posted 2001-02-12 11:33 PM


WOW!!! This is a very powerful poem you have here. I loved it dearly and is going into my library.

Life is like a storm, it passes you by without even knowing it~Amanda

jeremydraul
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State of Despair
3 posted 2001-02-13 10:22 AM


wonderful post here... I guess this is mainly the subject you write about, very well done...
"I hear the thunderous beating of my tearstained heart,"

Jeremy


"Life is fading me away, far away, but I’m sketching myself back, line by line, mark by mark." - Jeremy Raulinaitis---'Fading Me Away'

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2001-02-13 02:42 PM


I hope you can beat this sickness of wanting to be thin......be strong.......good poem.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies
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Twilight Zone
5 posted 2001-02-13 05:03 PM


It's good to see your realizing what's wrong in this situation.
If it helps you a lot, keep writing about it
we'll be here for you


So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Neokrew
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since 2000-12-24
Posts 60
VA
6 posted 2001-03-05 03:38 PM


Hey Babe,

Very well written you have a real talent at this I love reading your work cya soon bye

--Neo

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