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Poet on Acid
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0 posted 2001-02-12 10:09 AM


harm inflicted on one's self or others is also against PIP guidelines


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Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-02-12 01:28 PM


A decent poem.  The format is simple, but you do a nice job of it.
Best wishes for the future.  ^_^
-Allan


When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda

jeremydraul
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2 posted 2001-02-12 02:40 PM


lol, i love your shouts at the end...this was a very good interpretation of how you feel.. nice job bro

Jeremy


"Life is fading me away, far away, but I’m sketching myself back, line by line, mark by mark." - Jeremy Raulinaitis---'Fading Me Away'

Dark Enchantress
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3 posted 2001-02-12 02:58 PM


My god...this is absolute deja vu. I suppose that's why it really hit me profoundly. Great poem.   I hope you work things out.
Some advice? Just go with the flow and do what feels right in your heart. If I had done that then I'm sure....well communication is important.  


I am no one if not myself.

Angel of Darkness




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Lakewalker
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4 posted 2001-02-12 03:07 PM


POA,
I liked how this was written too (along with the other one).  I hope that things work out however you truely want them to.  

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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