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Words_of_Glitter
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0 posted 2001-02-11 09:40 PM


Don't Make me hate you--that would not be good
Just when our friendship is starting to strengthen
Something happens to try and break it down
Into little pieces
"Shards of friendship" would be floating around
And then
No matter how many pieces we retrieve-
It's impossible to get them all back
And parts of my heart that I gave to you
Will land on someone new
And I don't know how you handle things
But once I give someone a piece of my heart,
It is always theirs
Whether they want it or not
It's not recyclable--
Or reusable;
Not like the bottles and cans that led us here
And now, I am so confused--that "here" is the only place I know
Because "here" is constantly changing
And undefinable in terms of the heart...
You are like a brand;
Searing yourself into my life--
Into my mind
And I cannot get you off
You don't even know how hard I have tried
I am not stupid!
I realize it's so pathetic to follow a road that only leads to heartache
But right now, it's the only path I've found
I'm sure that there will be an intersection (somewhere)
I just might need someone to help me see it
Because I am so tired of thinking about you
That I have closed my eyes


"Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without."

© Copyright 2001 Sarah Morehouse - All Rights Reserved
jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
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State of Despair
1 posted 2001-02-11 09:54 PM


Nice, I loved it! Escpecially: "Because "here" is constantly changing
And undefinable in terms of the heart...
You are like a brand;
Searing yourself into my life--"

great detail and comparing!!

Jeremy


"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07
Posts 381

2 posted 2001-02-11 10:50 PM


Wow!!! You took the words right out of my heart. This is going into my library. I feel like this alot and I wish for you to know that you are not the only one and we are all here for you if you need us. "friends within a family" are we.


Keep searching, we are here, you only have to find us.~ Amanda

Tears of Glass
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since 2000-12-04
Posts 182
Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure
3 posted 2001-02-12 08:39 AM


Wow... What an awesome poem.  I understand how this is.  I hope things work out.. I loved it.

"Shards of friendship" would be floating around
And then
No matter how many pieces we retrieve-
It's impossible to get them all back"

*Jennifer

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Twilight Zone
4 posted 2001-02-12 05:41 PM


very beautiful poem....
i hope you decide to join us more often
thanks for the read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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5 posted 2001-02-12 07:11 PM


hey this was great. I liked this one


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Hill's_Chatabox
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since 2001-07-10
Posts 46
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6 posted 2001-07-13 02:02 PM


Sarah just to let ya know, I liked this one, and I know that someone will come along and sweap you off your feet, like you deserve.. be content and follow your grandma's advice, have fun with your friends now and boys later.. or somthing like that... Sarah I am always here to help make any decisions you need help on, but most of them you make on your own, and you make them very wisley.. Good poem...... Love ya
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