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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
"Help me" I said from beneath the frost "Help someone I think I'm lost" You cloud my thoughts just like my mind Your love is all I need to find Finding myself within your soul This is my one and most important goal I see you and risk the pain Because I can see the love to gain Thinking of you all day and dreaming all night Such simple things make my heart take flight this is about a friend of mine a long time ago who told me she didn't love me for her own reasons then later on she said she still did. I wrote this when she said she still did. Thought a nice 'Happy' poem from me was overdue. Enjoy >¶Øʆ< |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice nice.. glad to see the happy side, keep it up (i hope) Jeremy "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Woo hoo! A ~happy~ Tony! Me likes. hehe... well, you did mention it was from awhile ago. That answers some questions. ~_^ Great job! -Allan When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like how this is written, it's really good. I guess I'm off to read Joleen 2 now  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
a change of pace  see, you too are a romantic great job POA keep sharing |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww sweet. I hope all goes well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Curious why you felt the need to explain the poem? Drop the rhymes, make it longer, write what actually happened -- if you want to write what you felt, you have to write what you actually felt. the game begins, Brad |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
This is great! I did enjoy reading it! best wishes! ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Happy, happy!! Luvvvvv This is good. xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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