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Poet on Acid
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0 posted 2001-02-11 08:37 AM


looks like I won't be leaving YET, until the moderators decide to kick me out I'll keep on posting. As far as I know (not that I know anything I only WROTE the poem) there is nothing suicidal about this poem. This has to do with love not death. (note those tend to be the only things I write about for the most part) anyways please help me with a title? Enjoy

A cold sword piercing the heart
Blood slowly dripping down to the ground
These wounds are so stealthy could have been caused by a dart
A cure to such pain may never be found
The pain that becomes greater day by day
It consumes the heart the mind and the soul
This is one wound time will not pass away
No one can see as it secretly takes its toll
The blood from this wound meets the eye in the form of tears
Wounds of the heart and the emotion
The scars will still be seen even after the years
From wounds caused like this, from the lose of devotion

        >¶Øʆ<




[This message has been edited by Poet on Acid (edited 02-11-2001).]

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pixiechild
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since 2001-02-02
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1 posted 2001-02-11 11:20 AM


all u'r poems is so deep...but yet so beautiful. What about the title "a wound that will never heal" just a thought.

keep on writing and hopefully u don't hav to leave.

pix

pixiechild
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2 posted 2001-02-11 11:23 AM


sorry for second reply...what about "a wound so cold....."

pix

~sugarpie313~
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3 posted 2001-02-11 12:55 PM


i agree with pix, a wound that never heals or wahtever she said LOL that would be a good one. i love this poem. definitely goin in my library!!

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

Dark Enchantress
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4 posted 2001-02-11 01:19 PM


Deep, beautiful, raw honesty, bold imagery and emotions....I like.   I have no ideas for a title. Just pick a cool word and go with it. That's what I do.

I am no one if not myself.

Angel of Darkness



Angel in Flight
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5 posted 2001-02-11 01:29 PM


WONDERFUL JOB,POA!!!! Into the Library you go. Keep posting and the moderators better let you stay with us here. We truly NEED you!! Love aways ~ Amanda


Keep searching, we are here, you only have to find us.~ Amanda

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6 posted 2001-02-11 01:46 PM


  Go poet, go poet, it's yer birfday, its yer...Ok no. Man, this poem kicked some serious booty..Gave me shivers..and wow, what's this? No suicide images? Crazy! I  do picture someone torturing a man's heart. Great stuff.
  ~Carly


"Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron)

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7 posted 2001-02-11 08:19 PM


Well done on this one acid. I surely hope they don't kick you out any time soon.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jeremydraul
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8 posted 2001-02-11 08:30 PM


if they do kick you out, thanks for all your posts and replies. lovely poem here, im sure we've all had these feelings before...very well written bro

Jeremy


"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

Lakewalker
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9 posted 2001-02-11 10:56 PM


Nice job on the poem, and I hope they don't kick you out

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