navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #4 » It Hurts
Teen Poetry #4
Post A Reply Post New Topic It Hurts Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
apsara
Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70


0 posted 2001-02-11 12:01 PM


It Hurts

It hurts to be in love
It hurts to be loved
It hurts when your love's not reciprocated
It hurts when your friend loves your love too

It hurts when a friend's love is withdrawn
It hurts when love is the start of a hate
It hurts when love makes you lose a friendship
It hurts when love creates friction when there was none

It hurts when your friend loves someone with the same intensity
It hurts to know that you could do something to hurt loved ones
It hurts to beg someone to stay
It hurts to know you could lose your love one day


nOTE : This is about me and a friend. complicated stuff but i really feel bad for her. thing is that i can't do anything about it.


© Copyright 2001 apsara - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
1 posted 2001-02-11 12:04 PM


I been through this..........all is fair in love and war.

Nice poem here......expressed very well.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

HiddenSparklez
Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190
British Columbia, Canada
2 posted 2001-02-11 01:14 AM


Your format and repetition really expresses the pain this poem presents. Good job!  

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

DancinQueen
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
3 posted 2001-02-11 01:25 PM


hmm good poem here, im not clear on the situation but you express alot of pain (and hurt obviously   ) but i hope everything works out for the better, good luck

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Acies
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
4 posted 2001-02-11 06:14 PM


I too like the repetitious style
it added to the expression of you feelings
hope things get settled
talk to each other
good luck

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Allan Riverwood
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502
Winnipeg
5 posted 2001-02-11 09:37 PM


I know the feeling.
And you expressed it well.  Good job.
-Allan

When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #4 » It Hurts

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary