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Angel in Flight
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0 posted 2001-02-10 09:29 PM


Exquisite,overwhelming love unseen.
Within the separate soul you become free.
Through the darkness you are the light,
guiding others with their strife of life.
Then when you prophesies all has gone.
you need only reminisce the others song.
So play it back and vocalize again.
flying high, radiant within.
Darkness shadows all in need
Treasure the soil, lay the seed.
Cultivate the plant,  make it strong.
If roots entwine true loves souls nothing can go wrong.
And when this happens you must pray.
That you may get one last day.

I have truly lost me inspiration, and I know this poem is not even close to good, but oh well it has a great meaning even if it is not a great poem.





Keep searching, we are here, you only have to find us.~ Amanda




[This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 02-10-2001).]

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Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-02-10 11:38 PM


Actually I thought this poem was very nicely done here. Keep them rollin.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

HiddenSparklez
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2 posted 2001-02-11 01:16 AM


I also thought this poem was pretty good. The more adjectives, the more in depth a poem goes.  

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

jeremydraul
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3 posted 2001-02-11 01:29 AM


not as pleasant as your other miraculous work but it was definately a good one!

JeremY


"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

Poet on Acid
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4 posted 2001-02-11 08:27 AM


when you have lost all inspiration...write about the lack of inspiration. Always works for me. Anyway wonderful poem as usual, you'd better be careful or we'll expect master pieces everytime you post.

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Jenn Cirrincione
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5 posted 2001-02-11 01:27 PM


Very nice. I actually thought this was good. Keep it up.

xoxo
Jenn


"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia



Angel in Flight
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6 posted 2001-02-11 01:46 PM


lol @ POA. I have been trying to cut back on the good stuff, but everyone just tells me its bad and expects more from me. Thanks for the smile though, you hit the target.

Everyone else thank you very much for your reply.



Keep searching, we are here, you only have to find us.~ Amanda

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7 posted 2001-02-12 09:12 AM


I actually loved it

"And when this happens you must pray.
That you may get one last day."

I don't consider these words the work of lack of inspiration.  It's beautiful


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Lakewalker
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8 posted 2001-02-12 02:35 PM


"you need only reminisce the others song.
So play it back and vocalize again.
flying high, radiant within."

Yeah, I like it too

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Angel in Flight
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9 posted 2001-02-12 10:42 PM



Acrie~ Thank you so much *smiling that means sooo much to me.

Lakewalker~ Thank you also... I am happy you like it!



Keep searching, we are here, you only have to find us.~ Amanda

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