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Poet on Acid
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0 posted 2001-02-10 12:04 PM


This is a relativly new poem of mine and I have been quite happy lately due to a certain somone named Bergundy...But I have been warned/instructed/advised whatever by the moderators that the suicidal overtones of my work are not going to be accepted and they wont be tolerated much longer. I Doubt I will be staying here that much longer then. Anyways I would just like to clear up any confusion, I do not believe in suicide. It is not the way to go, no matter what happens in your life, you can still say you have one. Death is unescapable but suicide can be stopped. If you know someone who is suicidal get help for them even if it means jeopardizing your friendship. I have been suicidal before and weather I will be again I don't know. But I do not mean for my works to reflect that, I simply meant for them to show I want out of this life, without dying. anyways I hope this makes the moderaters happy...here is the actual poem..

The sun making it's journey across the sky
But in reality it's this planet that will actually fly
The day grows brighter by the hour
In the darkness it's enemies cower
And as the sun realizes the journey is at it's end
Still his place in the sky he tries to defend
But uprises the moon rested for battle
Bringing with it the stars like a stampede of cattle
The moon so small gains in power
As the sun begins to weaken by the hour
The battle rages on until just before night
But nothing lasts forever not even this fight
The sky is stained with the blood of the sun not quite red
But even after losing the battle the sun is not quite dead
He will rise again to meet the same fate
But that will be tomorrow...a whole new date

THIS IS JUST A SUNSET NO SUICIDE HERE

        >¶Øʆ<


[This message has been edited by Poet on Acid (edited 02-10-2001).]

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Ina
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1 posted 2001-02-10 12:12 PM


POA,
it was a very good poem. just a sunset. beautiful imagery.
regina
ps if u ever need to talk plz icq me or something.
plz dont leave passions!


for those who say I'm their friend, u know me not well for if u did u would not stay around anymore to watch me fall away.

Dark Enchantress
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2 posted 2001-02-10 12:16 PM


Wonderful poem. I know exactly what you're saying...and I'm glad you're not suicidal anymore. The fight makes us stronger and wiser.   I don't think that's true for me though. lol Anyway, keep'em coming.

I am no one if not myself.

Angel of Darkness



Allan Riverwood
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3 posted 2001-02-10 12:44 PM


Quite lovely!
As are all of your works, POA.  
You are very beloved around here, it's just tough for moderators to pinpoint what is suicidal and what isn't.  Thus is poetry.  i could probably claim that ~any~ poem was suicidal, and because it is a poem, you would not be able to argue.
Still, I do agree that they should limit it to ~direct~ reference to suicidal intent or action, as opposed to what could possibly be interpereted as that.
I really do hope you stick around, man.  You are quite the legend around here already.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Acies
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4 posted 2001-02-10 01:51 PM


a bit of sarcasm but an awesome poem  
This is one of the best I've read in all passions
You have captured such imagery in this poem
This need to be published, if you ask me
great job POA


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



jeremydraul
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5 posted 2001-02-10 02:21 PM


im sad to hear you might leave, you really shouldnt. if u do, at least u posted ur best poem!
"But uprises the moon rested for battle
Bringing with it the stars like a stampede of cattle"
nice job bro

JeremY


"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

Jenn Cirrincione
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6 posted 2001-02-10 02:28 PM


This was really good. I understand that these moderators can be a pain sometimes... but we gotta listen to the rules. You never know if a 10 year old is reading and questioning it. However, I hope you don't leave here!
xoxo
Jenn


"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia




[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 02-10-2001).]

Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-02-10 02:58 PM


Yes, definitely a great job of writing this poem.  I hope you choose not to leave.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Dopey Dope
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8 posted 2001-02-10 11:32 PM


NIcely done here acid........I liked this one a lot. I surely hope you decide to stay because I will track you down with a pelican if you don't.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

HiddenSparklez
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British Columbia, Canada
9 posted 2001-02-11 01:21 AM


No doubt, this poem was extremely filled with imagery and I loved it! Keep writing tho...  

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

Tears of Glass
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10 posted 2001-02-11 02:24 PM


This poem is the best poem I think I have ever read.  The imagery is absolutely amazing.. I love your writing POA, and I really hope you don't leave.  But if you do, feel free to email me sometime and still share your amazing works with me.  Supr23Grl@aol.com.  

*Jennifer

Greeneyes617
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Posts 329
Arkansas
11 posted 2001-02-11 04:52 PM


You did a really awesome job. Thanks for posting it. I hope to read more of your work.  
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