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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2001-02-10 12:22 PM

Ashen flakes swarm in flocks to embrace the neck.
Then, they vanish like she, whose tears have yet to
dry on my shoulder. And looking at life in retrospect,
I conclude that I’ve lost more than I meant to.

The tired hand pulls the curtain to hide a cloud
that has covered the sun and made the world gray.
In the absence of others, one begins to doubt
one’s own existence. The mirror reflects dismay.

The mirror reveals less than a wall, which uncovers
a shadow. Likewise, the memory feels only lightness.
Like a lost moth seeking light, her shadow hovers
on these barren fields which produce but whiteness.

Footprints expose patches of granite. Shadows leave
lasting imprints that evade the eye. The snow keeps
falling. Slowly, it covers her tracks and I grieve,--
Every flake reminds me of the phantom that never sleeps.

Check out my poetry here:

http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master

Poet on Acid
Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 325
Florida, USA

1 posted 2001-02-10 01:40 AM

Again I have to say...ouch. From what I can tell your work is mostly love poems with an extreme overtone of dispair...I like.

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Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
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2 posted 2001-02-10 12:05 PM

Wow, I'm only the second one to reply to this? The others are missing out. I'd have to say this is one of the best poems I've read in quite a while. Keep it up.

I am no one if not myself.

Angel of Darkness

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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-02-10 03:52 PM

Nicely done here!!!! I really liked your poetry. Very good one here.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-02-10 05:24 PM

i love the line about the snow covering her tracks.....you are such a romantic.....keep sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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