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Teen Poetry #4

My heart belongs to you

Angel Bee
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since 2001-01-30

Posts 176
Virginia

0 posted 2001-02-09 10:53 PM

My heart belongs to you

You hold my heart in your hands
You take me off to a distant land
Your smile melts my heart
How can you be so perfect and smart
Although you don't know my feelings for you
I'll let you know one day, and maybe, just maybe you'll feel the same way too

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-02-10 11:57 AM

Wow... very VERY nice one.
Well put together, great flow, nice rhyming.
You did this excellently. Simplicity allows more impact to it.
Great job.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-02-10 04:49 PM

I liked this one......very well written.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

~sugarpie313~
Member

since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

3 posted 2001-02-10 04:53 PM

i like this one a lot

i've always been one to not express my feelings either. but i'm over that now... lol i dont' care what people say/think. good job!!

~*Valerie*~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-02-11 05:21 PM

This is a really beautiful and sweet poem.
See, even Dopes is lost for words

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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