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Angel Bee
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0 posted 2001-02-09 10:37 PM





                When I see you

                                  I see your amazing smile
                Your cute Face
                       How tAll and skinny you are        
      They way you aLways look so good
   And how you're aLways there
                    How carIng and sweet you are
         Your smile shiNing from afar
                      Your gLeaming green eyes
      Laughing with yOur friends
            HOw you saVe each and every moment
                  When I sEe you

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Angel Bee
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1 posted 2001-02-09 10:38 PM


Okay, its a little out of whack, but I did my best. :o)
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2 posted 2001-02-09 10:50 PM


I don't think it's out of whack at all
I thought it flowed really good
I guess you really like this person a lot
pretty obvious after the read  
thanks for sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Allan Riverwood
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3 posted 2001-02-10 11:55 AM


You really enjoy this acrostic-esque style don't you?  I have never really seriously done one of these.
Very well done, Angelbee.  
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

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4 posted 2001-02-10 11:09 PM


Nicely done here. I liked this one a lot. Hope to see more of this style because I find it to be creative.

A message within a message.......



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2001-02-11 10:36 PM


I like this one, nice job

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