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jeremydraul
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0 posted 2001-02-09 06:35 AM


Prenote: There isnt one. Enjoy.

‘Casting A Shadow’

The raven sky doesn’t reveal,
It’s procedural candle grin;
Thou shall cast no shadow,
Of yesterday’s mortal sin;

I clench the head of the issue,
Beating it a’gone;
Remembering it not for long,
Thou shall pass on;    

Expunge this mood of Lucifer,
That leaves me so stark;
Thou shall cast no shadow,
For it is much too dark.

JeremY RaulinaitiS



"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

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1 posted 2001-02-09 08:37 AM


wow.. that is an amazing poem.  You are such a talented writer, and I admire your poems.  Keep it up!  

*Jennifer

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2 posted 2001-02-09 10:13 AM


wow..wow..wow..     i like ...Ooo and this was my 500th post!!   woohoo

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤



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3 posted 2001-02-09 10:20 AM


getting better and better everyday

congrats Kiles

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



jeremydraul
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4 posted 2001-02-09 02:33 PM


Thanks everyone...congrats DQ!

JeremY


"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

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5 posted 2001-02-09 09:47 PM


*digs out Webster's Dictionary and asks for a translation from Shakespeare-like writing to blonde-language*  this is great! it'd be better if i could understand it. *L*

~Valerie~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

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6 posted 2001-02-10 12:16 PM


What a wonderful thought to end it with.
I loved this one, Jeremy.  Great job.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-02-10 12:31 PM


Jeremy, I liked the way this poem was written, as usual the flow and everything was wonderful.  I really like this one.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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8 posted 2001-02-10 12:35 PM


  Yo there, this was magnificent!! Carly liked it lots and lots and lots. Keep that pencil\pen\keyboard\crayon movin.
  ~Carly


"Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron)

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9 posted 2001-02-10 04:39 PM


NICELY done jer! This one was very good. I liked it a lot. One of your good ones.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

HiddenSparklez
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10 posted 2001-02-10 09:04 PM


I enjoyed this poem very much. Keep writing!  

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

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