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eternal_darkone
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0 posted 2001-02-08 01:30 PM



The eyes open
And the body wakes
But the soul remains asleep
The body lives on
But the soul withers and dies

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1 posted 2001-02-08 04:57 PM


This is a wonderful piece. It's amazing how many people you'll see that seem as if they are only shells. You describe those people well. Thanks for posting!



"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
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2 posted 2001-02-08 10:40 PM


hmm i liked this. short and too the point with so much emotional depth, great piece

*dq


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3 posted 2001-02-09 12:10 PM


Very dark piece here but I wouldn't expect anything different. Nicely done.



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4 posted 2001-02-09 09:35 AM


you are very talented, there is doubt about that.  I'd love to see you write about happiness even once though.  I think you'd do really good with it.  keep your head up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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5 posted 2001-02-09 10:00 AM


  Wowz, another great one eternal..I rather enjoy the dark stuff...I tried to write somethin happy and that's how Baby Meets World came about..hah...well keep posting and I'll keep reading..
   ~Carly


"Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron)

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6 posted 2001-02-10 11:18 AM


It happens all to often.  People claim to be "living," but the soul is actually dead.
Quite sad it really is.
Good poem, you expressed this nicely.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

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