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Allan Riverwood
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0 posted 2001-02-08 12:12 PM


Self actualized
Heirarchy summits high
Cognitive mirage

© Copyright 2001 Brian James Lee - All Rights Reserved
Acies
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1 posted 2001-02-08 09:50 PM


maybe I should crown you the king of senryus.  You have mastered this style, and as you keep posting them, I'll be here to keep reading em.

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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2 posted 2001-02-08 11:45 PM


Well.......not your best, but better than I'll ever do.....no doubt about that.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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I admire it daily

jeremydraul
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3 posted 2001-02-09 06:12 AM


Cmon Allan, write some long in-depth poems! Altho this was very good!

JeremY


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4 posted 2001-02-11 12:06 PM


Jeremy, make a long in-depth poem????? WHAT!!! You need not a long poem to have depth. I beat you all that this senryu has more depth to it then some of the longest peoms ever made. Alot of times a long poem holds no depth what so ever, but a short one may hold something so deep and strong you can not explain it. Wonderful job, Allan. And geat ~depth~ to it. Love always me


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5 posted 2001-02-12 02:38 PM


Well, all I know is I think it's good

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