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Tenderly Touched, Frantically Held
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Tenderly Touched, Frantically Held |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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*well im not happy w/ this but oh well..i dont care anymore -=Tenderly Touched, Frantically Held=- Melting with anger blinded by love Pouring tears it's you im thinking of Disturbing recollections invading my dreams Quiet whimpers look at what you've done to me So tenderly touched my heart within Yet frantically held never the same again ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Heh... you told me you were going to write a poem with this title. You did a decent job on this. If you feel uncreative, I'll give you the same advice I gave everyone else... which is to try different formats. Keep it up, Kiley. This piece was not really bad at all, I liked the simplicity. Good luck. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I personally think that this is your most heart stopping poem. "So tenderly touched my heart within Yet frantically held never the same again"  Hope you start feeling better soon I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
your poems are better but your attitude is worse.. i guess thats better! great job once again... JeremY "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this poem. Nicely done and I liked the style within it too.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
ACIRE!!!! ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
yes, I am on I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
im at school..so my computer's REALLY slow, but please dont leave ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
k.....what's wrong?....  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR [This message has been edited by acire (edited 02-09-2001).] |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
r u mad at me over something?? ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
no i'm not...why should I? you'll always be my sweets  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
just making sure, but i'll mail you later cause i gotta go back to class, k?? bye babe** ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
bye...geez we made your post a chat room I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
nice CHAT ROOM ya got here... LOL this was really really good. i like it a lot  keep it up...~*VALERIE*~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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