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Twelve (12) Carnations
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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In no way does this anticipate harm, violence or disorder to another being. Its just a little gross piece I need to share. Thanks and Enjoy. ‘Twelve (12) Carnations’ Day before yesterday, I bought 12 carnations; Of you they were too, For our relations… I hope they blacken, And are eaten by insects; May cupid lose them, Out of my caring respect… May the arrow he discharges, Decapitate your ignorance. Roll upon the filthy ground, As my revenge does prance... 12 carnations, color of blood, From your swollen head; Reeking of your arrogance, From all the things you said… JeremY "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 02-08-2001).] |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
BRAVO! I cant get over this one. May the arrow he discharges, Decapitate your ignorance. Roll upon the filthy ground, As my revenge does prance... That blew me away. Great stuff, I will have to read more of your poetry. and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Sorry but this one made me laugh. I loved the irony. And hey, sue me for being a bit sadistic. Great job Jeremy, as always! I envy your consistency! -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
hey I lmao while writing this, no harm done and thanks u 2 JeremY "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Woo hoo! Go get her Jeremy...! Nice one here, it was like I just felt your anger.  It is kinda funny...hehexoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
This was way awesome! THere's not much more I can think of thean to say that it was awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Guys are like stars. There are millions of them, but only one will make your dreams come true. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
YEAH!!!!!!!!!!!!! Decapitated ignorance. So pretty. Hehe, Wunnerful job ya did here, as always.  Ya got talent, boy. Ya shure do.~Carly "Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron) |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
marvelous Jeremy get that anger off your chest keep writing and release it  great work I expect nothng less from you I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
well over time the mind forgives, this was just a poem in a bad mood... things are better again... thanks for the posts JeremY "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey babe Great piece as usual. im almost in love with it hehe keep it up*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nice here jer. I liked this one very dif from what I'm used to!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Now THIS is poetry Jer! I love reading these types of pieces.  They make me feel so alive and happy...I know, I know! I'm weird.  ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Jeremy, this was BEAUTIFUL... is an ironic sense... I loved the way you wrote it and said it... It is BRILLIANT!! Glad nothing has changed! Missed ya!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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